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Universities should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects. Do you agree or disagree?

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Universities should not accept equal numbers of male and female students because this is likely to lead to lower overall levels of education. Although it is clearly important that society provides equal opportunity to all members of society, men and women often choose different paths and society is best served by selecting university students based solely on merit. In this essay, the advantages of selecting students based on merit will be discussed. Providing equal opportunity to all people is a critical part of creating a fair society. It is highly desirable that all people within a society have the opportunity to achieve their personal goals and knowing that achievements are based on equal competition is very important for both those who achieve those goals as well as those who do not. Universities having gender quotas create the risk that people of both sexes may be excluded from their chosen course of study based on gender. Women and men are different and therefore it is not surprising that they choose different courses based on their personal preferences. For example, women more commonly choose courses such as nursing and teaching while men often prefer courses such as engineering and physics. Imposing quotas based on gender may mean that some courses may not attract enough qualified candidates or that a highly suitable candidate of one gender is excluded for a much less suitable candidate of the opposite sex in order to meet gender quotas. The effect of choosing lower quality candidates of one gender will ultimately lead to the lowering of the overall standard of courses. This could result in lower professional standards in some fields and is not beneficial to society as a whole. It is desirable to have a society that has roughly balanced numbers of educated people of both genders, but individual courses should not adopt quotas. In summary, if quotas are to be introduced they should only be introduced at an overall level not at a course level and then only if there is a significant gap between the numbers of students of each gender as quotas serve to decrease the overall quality of some courses and are a form of discrimination.
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served by selecting university students based
solely
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advantages of selecting students based on merit will
be discussed
.

Providing
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opportunity to all
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society. It is
highly
desirable that all
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opportunity to achieve their personal goals and knowing that achievements
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equal
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study based on gender.

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women more
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courses
such as nursing and teaching while

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men
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prefer
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courses
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based on gender may mean that
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courses
may not attract
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qualified
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of one gender
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for a much less suitable
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meet
gender quotas.

The effect of choosing lower quality
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candidates
of one gender will
ultimately


lead to the lowering of the
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overall
standard of
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courses
. This could result in

lower professional standards in
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some
fields and is not beneficial to
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society
as a

whole. It is desirable to have a
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society
that has roughly balanced numbers of

educated
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people
of both genders,
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individual
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courses
should not adopt

quotas.

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be introduced
they should
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at

an
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overall
level not at a
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course
level and then
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only
if there is a significant gap

between the numbers of students of each gender as quotas serve to decrease

the
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overall
quality of
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some
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courses
and are a form of discrimination.
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IELTS essay Universities should enrol equal numbers of male and female students in all subjects.

Essay
  American English
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363 words
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