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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Due to digitilization many advancements have been made in agricultural sector, however majority of population is still hungry because of inflation of food cost and living expenses. On the other hand goverment should help in those cases by providing subsidy or by launching schemes. In this 20th Century era, technology has taken over many task that includes farming where fields are no longer plague by cow or manual tool infact its done by automated tractors, moreover the cost of digitalization have increased the price of crops. Since demand is more and supply is less many vegetables are getting sold at much higher price making it difficult for the middle class or below poverty level people to access. For instance currently in India Toor dal is being sold at 115 rupee per kilo which is very expensive for any below poverty level family who earns monthy 3000. Alternatively, to fix this problem government should come forward and make changes in the market supply and conditions. It can create multiple food storage zones where they give edibles at subsidy rate for poor people. For example There are many Rashan and kirana store in india where government provide edibles as low as 2 rupee per kilo. for below poverty level who have BPL card. Few state government give mid-day meal to schools in village. To conclude, Digitalization has increased the efficiency in the farmining sector, however it has also increased the crops prices making it diificult for common people in developing nations to access. Government plays a huge role in this by giving subsidized staples and edibles to below poverty level indiuvals.
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digitilization
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advancements have
been made
in agricultural sector,
however
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majority of
population is
still
hungry
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because
of inflation of food cost and living expenses.
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goverment
should
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help
in those cases by providing subsidy or by launching schemes.

In this 20th Century era, technology has taken over
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that includes farming where fields are no longer plague by cow or manual tool
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infact
its done by automated tractors,
moreover
the cost of digitalization have increased the price of crops. Since demand is more and supply is less
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many
vegetables are getting sold at much higher price making it difficult for the middle
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class
or
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below
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poverty
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level
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people
to access.
For instance
currently
in India
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Toor
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dal
is
being sold
at 115
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rupee
per kilo which is
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very
expensive for any
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below
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poverty
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level
family who earns
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monthy
3000.

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, to
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fix
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government
should
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come
forward and
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make
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changes
in the market supply and conditions. It can create multiple food storage zones where they give edibles at subsidy rate for poor
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people
.
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Rashan
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kirana
store in
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india
where
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provide edibles as low as 2
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rupee
per kilo.
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for
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below
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poverty
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level
who have BPL card. Few state
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government
give mid-day meal to schools in village.

To conclude
, Digitalization has increased the efficiency in the
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farmining
sector,
however
it has
also
increased the crops prices making it
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diificult
for common
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people
in developing nations to access.
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Government
plays a huge role in this by giving subsidized staples and edibles to
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below
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poverty
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level
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indiuvals
.
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IELTS essay in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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