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In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still so hungry.

In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still so hungry. bjO6
In the present time, most of people are doing farming in India. A number of individuals farmers. Because of, in the previous time all people farmers and they mostly was doing this and the same thing do In the present time. Many tunes of crops grow in the land but even if several people around the nation still hungry. I will eleborate in my looming paragraphs. To begin with firstly, farmers are very hard working but thus, they donot get good profit from this work. The sell crops, Vegetables and so on in the orchard markets. but shopkeeper gave little money to the farmers and the sell high rate in the markets. poor massive cannot purchase this because of all vegetables and eater vasta rate has so high.
In the present time, most of
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doing farming
in India. A number of individuals
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farmers
.
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Because
of, in the previous time all
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people
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farmers and
they
mostly
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was
doing this and the same thing do In the present time.
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Many
tunes of crops grow in the land
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but
even if several
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people
around the nation
still
hungry. I will
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eleborate
in my looming paragraphs. To
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with
firstly
,
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farmers
are
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very
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hard working
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but
thus
, they
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donot
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get
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good
profit from this work. The sell crops, Vegetables and
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so
on in the orchard markets.
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but
shopkeeper gave
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little
money to the
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farmers
and the sell high rate in the markets.
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poor
massive cannot
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purchase
this
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because
of all vegetables and eater
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vasta
rate has
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IELTS essay In spite of the advance made in agriculture, many people around the world still so hungry.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
128 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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