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In some developing country, children in rural areas still don’t have the access to education. Some people believe that we should provide more schools and teachers. Some think we should provide computers and Internet access in priority. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that computers and the Internet have become an indispensible component of education and that, as a result, schools and teachers no longer play an important role in education. Others argue that schools and teachers are still necessary for effective teaching.  While computers and Internet access are helpful in learning, I believe that schools and teachers are of greater significance. It is true that the internet is a vast repository of information. The internet can provide you with knowledge on any topic on the planet. This information, however, lacks credibility. It requires a lot of expertise to know what information to get and from where to get it. Students still need the guidance of teachers at all stages of learning. Teachers have the ability to make even the most mundane and uninteresting subjects look intriguing. Teachers, without a doubt, educate students more. Despite the fact that increasing attention has been placed on the Internet, it is undeniable that the computer is insufficient for the learning and practice of more complex ideas. It can determine whether the answer is correct or incorrect, but it cannot tell where the student went wrong. Tasks involving reasoning cannot be taught using computers. Furthermore, teachers supplement books and other materials with their own expertise earned through experience. Secondly, teachers can stimulate interest, and it is an undeniable fact that stimulated people tend to learn more. They can keep students focused on studying. They provide a faster and simpler way to present information to the students. They can get down to the level of a student and so are definitely better than computers. Finally, teachers are role models for students. They are scholars in action. They not only teach academic subjects, but also many social skills. To put it in a nutshell, while computers and the internet have undoubtedly become crucial in education, the importance of schools and instructors cannot be overstated.
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believe that computers and the Internet have become an
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indispensible
component of education and that,
as a result
,
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schools
and
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teachers
no longer play an
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important
role in education. Others argue that
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schools
and
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teachers
are
still
necessary for effective teaching.  While computers and Internet access are helpful in learning, I believe that
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schools
and
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teachers
are of greater significance.

It is true that the internet is a vast repository of
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information
. The internet can provide you with knowledge on any topic on the planet. This
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information
,
however
, lacks credibility. It requires
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a lot of
expertise to know what
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information
to
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get
and from where to
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get
it.
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Students
still
need the guidance of
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teachers
at all stages of learning.
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Teachers
have the ability to
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make
even the most mundane and uninteresting subjects look intriguing.
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Teachers
, without a doubt, educate
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students
more.

Despite the fact that increasing attention has
been placed
on the Internet, it is undeniable that the computer is insufficient for the learning and practice of more complex
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ideas
. It can determine whether the answer is correct or incorrect,
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but
it cannot
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tell
where the
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student
went
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wrong
. Tasks involving reasoning cannot
be taught
using computers.
Furthermore
,
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teachers
supplement books and other materials with their
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own
expertise earned through experience.
Secondly
,
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teachers
can stimulate interest, and it is an undeniable fact that stimulated
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people
tend to learn more. They can
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keep
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students
focused on studying. They provide a faster and simpler way to present
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information
to the
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students
.
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They
can
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get
down to the level of a
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student
and
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so
are definitely better than computers.
Finally
,
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teachers
are role models for
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students
. They are scholars in action. They not
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only
teach academic subjects,
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but
also
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many
social
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skills
.

To put it in a nutshell, while computers and the internet have
undoubtedly
become crucial in education, the importance of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
schools
and instructors cannot
be overstated
.
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IELTS essay In some developing country, children in rural areas still don’t have the access to education. Some people believe that we should provide more schools and teachers. Some think we should provide computers and Internet access in priority.

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