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In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. v. 3
Generally people living in cities or towns close to museums or historical sites don't prefer visiting them regularly. In the following essay, I would like to discuss the reasons for that situation and things that can be done in order to change them. To begin with, the majority of people living close to heritage sites don't understand their true value. Hence, they end up underestimating the importance and they neglect the benefit of visiting such places. In order to bring a change in this scenario, many NGO's (Non-Governmental Organisations) and Archaeological Societies are working together for years now. For example, after years of efforts by many NGOs, common public living in the city of Warangal, Telangana came to know the heritage and historical importance of the Warangal Fort. This enlightenment brought a huge change in the number of local people visiting the fort, leading to an enormous increase in the funds and further improvement of the site. Secondly, heritage sites are usually overcrowded with people and jam packed with traffic all the time. This situation generally builds up a negative impression in the minds of people living around that area. Many people even try to avoid ways close to such sites in their daily commute. However, to change the scenario and to attract the local crowd, developing and organizing the museum or historical site can help. To illustrate, recent development of an archaeological museum in Hampi, Karnataka, in terms of improved basic amenities such as parking facilities and proper maintenance of the area surrounding the museum has drastically increased the number of local people visiting the museum. To conclude, museums and historical sites play an impeccable role in inculcating the glory and culture of the past into the present world. Its our basic responsibility to look after and develop them to attract more people, irrespective of being local or non local.
Generally
people
living
in cities or towns close to
museums
or
historical
sites
don't prefer visiting them
regularly
. In the following essay, I would like to discuss the reasons for that situation and things that can
be done
in order to
change
them.

To
begin
with, the majority of
people
living
close to heritage
sites
don't understand their true value.
Hence
, they
end
up underestimating the
importance and
they neglect the benefit of visiting such places. In order to bring a
change
in this scenario,
many
NGO's
(Non-Governmental
Organisations
) and Archaeological Societies are working together for years
now
.
For example
, after years of efforts by
many
NGOs, common public
living
in the city of Warangal, Telangana came to know the heritage and
historical
importance of the Warangal Fort. This enlightenment brought a huge
change
in the number of
local
people
visiting the fort, leading to an enormous increase in the funds and
further
improvement of the site.

Secondly
, heritage
sites
are
usually
overcrowded with
people
and jam packed with traffic all the time. This situation
generally
builds up a
negative
impression in the minds of
people
living
around that area.
Many
people
even try to avoid ways close to such
sites
in their daily commute.
However
, to
change
the scenario and to attract the
local
crowd, developing and organizing the
museum
or
historical
site
can
help
. To illustrate, recent development of an archaeological
museum
in
Hampi
, Karnataka, in terms of
improved
basic amenities such as parking facilities and proper maintenance of the area surrounding the
museum
has
drastically
increased the number of
local
people
visiting the museum.

To conclude
,
museums
and
historical
sites
play an impeccable role in inculcating the glory and culture of the past into the present world.
Its
our basic responsibility to look after and develop them to attract more
people
, irrespective of being
local
or non
local
.
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IELTS essay In some cultures old age is more valued, while in other cultures youth is more valued. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
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