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In some countries, young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard for their study. What do you think the causes and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In some countries, young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard for their study. What do you think the causes and what solutions can you suggest? m5ADA
In recent years, youngsters live a sedentary lifestyle due to their lack of time to relax even to play around with their peers. Moreover, the school duties sometimes bring them in full of pressure. I strongly believe that this case is caused by the parental pressure and university competition. Therefore, this essay will look into the causes provided by some solutions. Parents sometimes bring pressure toward the children’s life since parents demand the children to pursue a higher future career. They tend to encourage children to spend their time for study, even they are not afraid to spend money for children education. For instance, parents will put the children into several courses which are relevant to their study. They believe that bringing children to the course will pose a help to master their studies at school. Therefore, there is no spare time for young people to enjoy their life. On the one hand, university competition force students to study much harder since university just recruits or accepts students who have higher grades. Entering university level will create a high competition among others nationally even internationally. Moreover, the university has a high standard as a requirement. Consequently, to gain the standard, young people should make good preparation. Therefore, it sometimes makes young people under-pressure even depression. They will try to do something that enables them to gain their goals such as study a lot. As the result, the best solution to cope with these problems is the awareness of parents. Parents should realise that their actions can cause anxiety and stress among the children. Therefore, bring back the role of parents is essential in this case. They should understand the children’s condition thus children can use their spare time to stress-relief such as go on vacation or hang out with their peers. Additionally, affirmative action is needed to overtake the university case. The government should expand the number of universities, thus it can reduce the competition level and young people would then have a variety of choices. As the result, youngsters would be able to spend their teenage time with joy and happiness. To sum up, the understanding between parents and children will bring a beautiful harmony and followed by a support from the government. Therefore, it is easy for youngsters to suffer from this problem.
In recent years, youngsters
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live
a sedentary lifestyle due to their lack of
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time
to relax even to play around with their peers.
Moreover
, the school duties
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sometimes
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bring
them in full of pressure. I
strongly
believe that this case
is caused
by the parental pressure and
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university
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competition
.
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, this essay will look into the causes provided by
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some
solutions.
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Parents
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sometimes
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bring
pressure toward the
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children’s
life since
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parents
demand the
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children
to pursue a higher future career. They tend to encourage
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children
to spend their
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time
for
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study
, even they are not afraid to spend money for
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children
education.
For instance
,
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parents
will put the
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children
into several courses which are relevant to their
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study
. They believe that bringing
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children
to the course will pose a
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help
to master their
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studies
at school.
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Therefore
, there is no spare
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time
for
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young
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people
to enjoy their life.

On the one hand,
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university
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competition
force students to
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study
much harder since
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university
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just
recruits or accepts students who have higher grades. Entering
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university
level will create a high
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competition
among others
nationally
even
internationally
.
Moreover
, the
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university
has a high standard as a requirement.
Consequently
, to gain the standard,
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young
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people
should
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make
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good
preparation.
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, it
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sometimes
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makes
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young
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people
under-pressure even depression. They will try to do something that enables them to gain their goals such as
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study
a lot.

As the result, the best solution to cope with these problems is the awareness of
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parents
.
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Parents
should
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realise
that their actions can cause anxiety and
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stress
among the
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children
.
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Therefore
,
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bring
back the role of
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parents
is essential
in this case
. They should understand the
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children’s
condition
thus
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children
can
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use
their spare
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time
to
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stress
-relief such as go on vacation or hang out with their peers.
Additionally
, affirmative action
is needed
to overtake the
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university
case. The
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government
should expand the number of
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universities
,
thus
it can
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reduce
the
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competition
level and
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young
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people
would then have a variety of choices. As the result, youngsters would be able to spend their teenage
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time
with joy and happiness.

To sum up, the understanding between
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parents
and
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children
will
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bring
a
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beautiful
harmony and followed by a support from the
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government
.
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Therefore
, it is easy for youngsters to suffer from this problem.
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IELTS essay In some countries, young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard for their study. What do you think the causes and what solutions can you suggest?

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