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In some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Q9qy

Family is a central part in Indian society. Divorce rate is one of the lowest in the world. There is lot of extended family, and there is an overall strong community feeling. USA has an extremely individualistic culture, so family is not important. Parents and kids are not closely connected or at all after 18. Similarly, friendship is mostly for personal gains and fleeting in nature in USA. The fake ‘hi, thank you, sorry’ is always there, but not much beyond that. This is increasing in India too, but still not nearly at the same level especially if you leave the major metros. As a simple example, you cannot expect to borrow 20$ from anyone in America even if you have known them for 15 years. Educational opportunities - India 5, USA 5 India has relatively few universities to support its enormous population. Admission systems emphasize rote memorization through entrance exams and lack creativity. On top of this, the quality of education in most universities is mediocre at best. Many Indians have degrees but not the skills required to succeed. STEM education is highly regarded. USA has a huge number of universities, many of them world-class. Acceptance employs few objective measures such as standardized testing and a multitude of random parameters like sports, essays, extracurricular activities, recommendations making it extremely subjective. Non-Asians benefit unfairly from this. In addition, most universities are prohibitively expensive rendering them inaccessible to a majority of people. Most Americans are not very educated. Going to grad school is rare. STEM grads are outcast as anti-social nerds in middle and high schools, where the quality of education is poor. The anti-intellectualism reflects directly in the society as most cannot do basic calculations without a calculator, and are oblivious to external affairs. The media propaganda doesn’t help. The European model is ideal in this category.

Family is a central part in Indian society. Divorce rate is one of the lowest in the world. There is It seems that an article is missing.a lot of
lot of
 extended family, and there is an overall
 strong community feeling. USA has an extremely
 individualistic culture, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 family is not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
. Parents and kids are not closely
 connected or at all after 18.

Similarly
, friendship is mostly
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in USA
. The fake ‘hi, thank you, sorry’ is always there, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 not much beyond that. This is increasing in India too, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
still
 not nearly
 at the same level especially
 if you This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 the major metros. As a simple example, you cannot This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipate
expect
 to borrow The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: "$20".$20
20$
 from anyone in America even if you have known them for 15 years.

Educational opportunities Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
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 India 5, USA 5

India has relatively
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universities
 to support its enormous population. Admission systems emphasize rote memorization through entrance exams and lack creativity. On top of this, the quality of education in most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
universities
 is mediocre at best. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
Many
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but
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skills
 required to succeed. STEM education is highly
 regarded.

USA has a huge number of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
universities
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 of them world-This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :coursetraining
class
. Acceptance employs few objective measures such as standardized testing and a multitude of random parameters like sports, essays, extracurricular activities, recommendations making it extremely
 subjective. Non-Asians benefit unfairly
 from this. In addition
, most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withacademyeducational institution
universities
 are prohibitively
 expensive rendering them inaccessible to a majority of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. Most Americans are not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 educated. Going to grad school is rare. STEM grads are outcast as anti-social nerds in middle and high schools, where the quality of education is poor. The anti-intellectualism reflects directly
 in the society as most cannot do basic calculations without a calculator, and are oblivious to external affairs. The media propaganda doesn’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
The
 European model is ideal in this category. 