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In some countries, the number of people using bikes as main transport mode is decreasing, even though it is so beneficial why is this so how can people and courage to use more bicycles

In some countries, the number of people using bikes as main transport mode is decreasing, even though it is so beneficial why is this so how can people and courage to use more bicycles BMBVa
Globalisation has brought tremendous changes in the whole world. Gone are the days, bicycle used to among masses. Whereas nowadays, individual give preference to other transport modes like car and bikes In this essay, I will highlight some reasons of this phenomenon and suggest ways to motivate people to use more bicycles. There are many reasons for not using the bicycle in today's world. The first and foremost reason is the car and public transport is very lucrative as compared to bicycle because it saves our precocious time while travelling. Besides this, the current century witnessed tremendous advancements in technology. Therefore the roads are full with heavy traffic so bicycles are no saving. Last but not least people want to show off their status. Due to this majority of people give preference to using bikes instead of bicycles. There are many ways to motivate people to use the bicycle. One approach is the government have to impose high tax on these types of vehicles like car, buses and so on so that individuals give preference to bicycle which is very beneficial for health. Another approach is, the bicycle is a cheap and green mode of transport. Media such as TV could be used for encouraging individual to use bicycle and the administration can motivate new generation by organising new camps in schools and colleges and tell them advantages of bicycle. To conclude, the above-mentioned argument in a nutshell. It can be concluded everything has its own importance under the sun and bicycle is one of them. The government can implement some effective steps to promote the use of bicycles.
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Globalisation
has brought tremendous
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changes
in the whole world. Gone
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are
the days,
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bicycle
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used
to among masses. Whereas nowadays, individual give preference to other transport modes like car and bikes In this essay, I will highlight
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some
reasons of this phenomenon and suggest ways to motivate
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people
to
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use
more bicycles.

There are
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many
reasons for not using the
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bicycle
in
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today
's world. The
first
and foremost reason is the car and public transport is
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very
lucrative as compared to
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bicycle
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because
it saves our precocious time while travelling.
Besides
this, the
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current
century witnessed tremendous advancements in technology.
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Therefore
the roads are
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full with
heavy traffic
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so
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bicycles
are no saving. Last
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not
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least
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people
want to
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show
off their status. Due to this majority of
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people
give preference to using bikes
instead
of bicycles.

There are
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many
ways to motivate
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people
to
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use
the
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bicycle
. One approach is the
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government
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have to
impose high tax on these types of vehicles like car, buses and
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on
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so
that individuals give preference to
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bicycle
which is
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very
beneficial for health. Another approach is, the
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bicycle
is a
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cheap
and green mode of transport. Media such as TV could be
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used
for encouraging individual to
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use
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bicycle
and the administration can motivate new generation by
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organising
new camps in schools and colleges and
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tell
them advantages of bicycle.

To conclude
, the above-mentioned argument in a nutshell. It can
be concluded
everything has its
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own
importance under the sun and
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bicycle
is one of them. The
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government
can implement
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some
effective steps to promote the
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use
of
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bicycles
.
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IELTS essay In some countries, the number of people using bikes as main transport mode is decreasing, even though it is so beneficial why is this so how can people and courage to use more bicycles

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269 words
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