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In some countries some people think it is necessary to spend some on new transportation while other think money should be invest on old transportation

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In this present era an efficient transport system works like a human backbone. Now a days almost everything is highly depended on transportation while, ancient people have suffered during their time due to lake of such facilities. Some people think that there must be huge investment on transportation including new railways however, other believe that money should only invest on present transport system. In this essay i will discuss both view while doing so give my opinion. Firstly, as population is rising, the demand for transport is also increasing because it consumes less time and drops traveler on their destination. Investing more money on new transportation system would be effective policy because unique technologies are updating day in day out even so, this would be more beneficial for our environmental issues. Moreove, unique transport system including rails would be more comfortable with less cost however, these consume shorter fuels. Secondly, Old machineries are reliable with strong powerful engines which could lift heavy weight and comfort long journey. Beside it’s heavy machine, more improvements could be made if money invested properly on such infrastructure because number of people are more confident about such old technologies. Moreover, these old machineries considered historical assets neither people nor young generation want to neglect such precious gifts form technology. In my view, investing on new transport system would be best option because by this we could disable environmental problem such as global warming, air pollution, asthma, and some health related diseases, indeed new technologies could assist to save natural resources for future generations.
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works like a human backbone.
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almost everything is
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depended on transportation while, ancient
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people
have suffered during their time due to lake of such facilities.
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Some
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people
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think
that there
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must
be huge investment on transportation including
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new
railways
however
, other believe that money should
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only
invest on present
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transport
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system
. In this essay
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i
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give my opinion.

Firstly
, as population is rising, the demand for
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transport
is
also
increasing
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because
it consumes less time and drops traveler on their destination. Investing more money on
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new
transportation
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system
would be effective policy
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because
unique technologies are updating day in day out even
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so
, this would be more beneficial for our environmental issues.
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Moreove
, unique
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transport
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system
including rails would be more comfortable with less cost
however
, these consume shorter fuels.

Secondly
,
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Old
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machineries
are reliable with strong powerful engines which could lift heavy weight and comfort long journey. Beside
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it’s
heavy machine, more improvements could
be made
if money invested
properly
on such infrastructure
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because
number of
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people
are more confident about such
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old
technologies.
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, these
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machineries
considered historical assets neither
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people
nor young generation want to neglect such precious gifts form technology.

In my view, investing on
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new
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transport
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system
would
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option
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because
by this we could disable environmental problem such as global warming, air pollution, asthma, and
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some
health related diseases,
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new
technologies could assist to save natural resources for future generations.

IELTS essay In some countries some people think it is necessary to spend some on new transportation while other think money should be invest on old transportation

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  American English
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