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In some countries, some adults continue to live with their parents for years after they completed their education and found a job. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantage?

Some countries such as the Philippines and Mexico believe in extended family, wherein, having a job or even having family does not require them to move out of their parents house. This essay, will try to weight both positive and negative side of this trend. In positive note, the closeness bond of the family will be much stronger. The quality and quantity of time they spend will strengthened their relationship. For an instance, In a family that both childrens are working they prefer to stay with their parents rather than having their own place. First, they can be with them all the time. In the Philippines where family matters we always treasure the time that we are spending with our parents. We can look after our olding parents and we can take good care of them, with this the bond the hold this relationship grows. Secondly, both the childrens and parent can save more money by sharing bills and other house payments. Conversely, the thought of staying in parents house even you are capable of living seperately you are removing yourself the chance to grow on your own. The sense of indepence the critical decision making will not be enhance if you are not lliving alone. In conclusion, even we saw the negative part, the advantage of staying with your parents still outweigh it. Preserving family, loving, protecting and keeping them is the most important values that we can share to our next genereation.
Some
countries such as the Philippines and Mexico believe in extended
family
, wherein, having a job or even having
family
does not require them to
move
out of their
parents
house
. This essay, will try to weight both
positive
and
negative
side of this trend. In
positive
note, the closeness bond of the
family
will be much stronger. The quality and quantity of time they spend will strengthened their relationship. For an instance, In a
family
that both
childrens
are working they prefer to stay with their
parents
rather
than having their
own
place.
First
, they can be with them all the time. In the Philippines where
family
matters we always treasure the time that we are spending with our
parents
. We can look after our
olding
parents and
we can take
good
care of them, with this the bond the hold this relationship grows.
Secondly
, both the
childrens
and
parent
can save more money by sharing bills and other
house
payments.
Conversely
, the
thought
of staying in
parents
house
even you are capable of living
seperately
you are removing yourself the chance to grow on your
own
. The sense of
indepence
the critical
decision making
will not be
enhance
if you are not
lliving
alone.
In conclusion
, even we
saw
the
negative
part, the advantage of staying with your
parents
still
outweigh it. Preserving
family
, loving, protecting and keeping them is the most
important
values that we can share to our
next
genereation
.
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IELTS essay In some countries, some adults continue to live with their parents for years after they completed their education and found a job. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantage?

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