Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Various cultures affect differently how people bring up their children. In some, people make their children believe that when they do their best, they can succeed anything they want to. In this essay, I will outline the perceived drawbacks of giving this message to children, and explain why I feel that there are far more significant advantages. It can be thought that making children believe they can accomplish anything they want, as long as they try hard enough might cause harm on children's personality. I t might be the case because if their children fail, their relationship might be affected and they might not be reliable on their childre's eyes. Therefore, some people prefer to be realistic and do not want to ruin the relationship with their children for even a slight chance.

Various cultures affect differently
 how This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 bring up their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
. In This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 believe that when they do their best, they can succeed anything they want to. In this essay, I will outline the perceived drawbacks of giving this message to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
, and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :interpret
explain
 why I feel that there are far more significant advantages. It can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 that making You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 believe they can accomplish anything they want, as long as they try This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :arduous
hard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpotencyefficacyvalor
might
 cause harm on children's personality. I t You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpotencyefficacyvalor
might
 be the case This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 if their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 fail, their relationship You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpotencyefficacyvalor
might
 be Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).affected, and
affected and
 they You use this word too often, consider replacing it withpotencyefficacyvalor
might
 not be reliable on their Possible spelling mistake found.childrenchild re
childre
's eyes. Therefore
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 prefer to be realistic and do not want to ruin the relationship with their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 for even a slight chance. 