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IN SOME COUNTRIES, OWNING A HOME RATHER THAN RENTING ONE IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR PEOPLE

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Shelter is a basic need indeed. In number of countries, having their own apartment or flat is important compared to renting one from the house owners. However, I think owning an apartment or a flat is favorable to people. As we all know, renting allows us to do only a certain things in a house. When a person rents a house for his family, he is restricted from modifying the flat as per his wish. Even though he is paying the monthly rental. For example, families cannot paint the color they want or hang a picture of their wish. A family lived next to us in rented flat. They got sued for changing the door color. Renting a house is implied with rental agreements, when the agreement expires, families have to leave. It does not matter they found a new apartment or not. Due to these scenarios, I think having an own house is a blessing. Moreover, when you buy a house the rate is fixed and land in owned. While you are on a rented flat, rent can be increased on a monthly basis or yearly basis regardless of whether the income has increased or not. In 2019 my rent for the hostel room was $700. However it has now hiked up to $925, which is unfair. Also, I advise, it is better to save the money to acquire a place rather than renting. This would bring enormous benefits in the future. If you already own a house you can allocate that rental cash to buy a second handed vehicle. To conclude, owning a house is vital is these days, when the inflation increases, the rate for the rent will also increase, thus better save some money and buy a place in the future. So, I strongly think owning a flat or a house is crucial compared to renting one.
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indeed
. In number of countries, having their
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apartment or
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flat
is
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important
compared to
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renting
one from the
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house
owners.
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, I
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think
owning an apartment or a
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flat
is favorable to
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people
.

As we all know,
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renting
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allows
us to do
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only
a certain
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things
in a
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. When a person
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rents
a
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house
for his
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family
, he
is restricted
from modifying the
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flat
as per his wish.
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Even though
he is paying the monthly rental.
For example
,
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families
cannot paint the color they want or hang a picture of their wish. A
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family
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lived
next
to us in rented
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flat
. They
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got
sued for changing the door color.
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Renting
a
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house
is implied
with rental agreements, when the agreement expires,
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families
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have to
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. It does not matter they found a new apartment or not. Due to these scenarios, I
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think
having an
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own
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house
is a blessing.

Moreover
, when you
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buy
a
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house
the rate is
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fixed
and land in
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owned
. While you are on a rented
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flat
,
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rent
can
be increased
on a monthly basis or yearly basis regardless of whether the income has increased or not. In 2019 my
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rent
for the hostel room was $700.
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However
it has
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now
hiked up to $925, which is unfair.
Also
, I advise, it is better to save the money to acquire a place
rather
than
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renting
. This would bring enormous benefits in the future.
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If
you already
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own
a
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house
you can allocate that rental cash to
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buy
a second handed vehicle.

To conclude
, owning a
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house
is vital is these days, when the inflation increases, the rate for the
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rent
will
also
increase,
thus
better save
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some
money and
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buy
a place in the future.
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, I
strongly
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think
owning a
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flat
or a
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house
is crucial compared to
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renting
one.
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IELTS essay IN SOME COUNTRIES, OWNING A HOME RATHER THAN RENTING ONE IS VERY IMPORTANT FOR PEOPLE

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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