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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. awq0P
in some state people would like to purchase a house more than rent them because they believe it is crucial thing. In my point of view, owning a home is advantages for people because it make them encourage themselves working and saving but for some reasons renting a home is way more benefits, reason is they still have their place even though they dose not own it. firstly, I believe people want to have their own home if they could but the way to goal is journey, they must working hard to get plenty of money as well as saving cost for their big life present. Owing a house is dream for most humans so this dream pushing them to working hard, for someone working harder, they make lots of money that they can save and also earn for daily life. For example, middle-aged people want to have owned a home so they plan their goal and working hard to get money for using and saving for home, while they do that their life becoming even better than usual. secondly, owning a house could benefits your mind health, you could gets a house when your plan successfully thus your feeling is appreciating it makes mind cheerful and the beauty shows through, you will healthier, moreover, happier. Not only just good mind but also good body health because it is your home you could do every things you want to do such as exercise, cooking or planting also family’s activities too. on the other hand, for some humankind owning a home are cons for them because when your become a house owner you have to pay for every single things in your house, for someone that could not support this extra things having a home could be a bad idea so they decided to renting to save their monthly income. Example, if you have a home you have to pay for gardener every month whereas people who renting a home do not have to do that. in conclusion, owning a house is way more advantage than disadvantage the reason is when you want to have a house you working harder, saving more than spending and when you achieved your goal you are on cloud nine, however, there are some reasons that make people want to rent to save their home salary.
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in
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state
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people
would like to
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purchase
a
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house
more than rent them
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because
they believe it
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is crucial
thing. In my point of view,
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owning
a home is advantages for
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people
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because
it
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make
them encourage themselves
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working
and
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saving
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but
for
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some
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reasons
renting a home is way more benefits,
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reason
is they
still
have their place
even though
they dose not
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own
it.

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firstly
, I believe
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people
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want
to have their
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own
home if they could
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but
the way to goal is journey, they
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must
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working
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to
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get
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plenty
of money
as well
as
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saving
cost for their
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big
life present. Owing a
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house
is dream for most humans
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so
this dream pushing them to
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working
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hard
, for someone
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working
harder, they
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make
lots of money that they can save and
also
earn for daily life.
For example
, middle-aged
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people
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want
to have
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owned
a home
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so
they plan their goal and
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working
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hard
to
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get
money for using and
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saving
for home, while they do that their life becoming even better than usual.

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secondly
,
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owning
a
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house
could
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benefits
your mind health, you could
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gets
a
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house
when your plan
successfully
thus
your feeling is appreciating it
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makes
mind cheerful and the beauty
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shows
through, you will healthier,
moreover
, happier. Not
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only
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good
mind
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also
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good
body health
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because
it is your home you could do every
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things
you
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to do such as exercise, cooking or planting
also
family’s activities too.

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on
the other hand, for
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humankind
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owning
a home are cons for them
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because
when your become a
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house
owner you
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have to
pay for every single things in your
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house
, for someone that could not support this extra things having a home could be a
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bad
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idea
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they decided to renting to save their monthly income. Example, if you have a home you
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have to
pay for gardener every month whereas
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people
who renting a home do not
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have to
do that.

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in
conclusion,
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owning
a
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house
is way more advantage than disadvantage the
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reason
is when you
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want
to have a
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house
you
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working
harder,
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saving
more than spending and when you achieved your goal you are on cloud nine,
however
, there are
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some
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reasons
that
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make
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people
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want
to rent to save their home salary.
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IELTS essay In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
390 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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