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Admittedly, Obesity is the main concern rapidly spawning at an unprecedented rate in some origin. However, the adverse consequences of unbalanced lifestyle recognized which are vulnerable to human structure. This essay would discuss the causes of this issue are and what preventive should be taken to curb this illness. It is highly likely that unhygienic food intake is increasing and a threat to digestive system. Firstly, the quantity of processed or packed food is increasing everyday because of having time constraints. As, both the gender are performing multi task so they get lesser time to perform cooking for themselves owing to having detrimental effect on their entire life Likewise, diabetics, heart problem and many more with the increased adoption of sedentary lifestyle. Beside this, the excessive use of artificial fertilizer by the farmers has severe effect on individual`s. Henceforth, the visible effect of unhealthy lifestyle has rectified and causes a great harm to humans. Is there any solution to resolve this repercussion? Yes, if the proper diets would follow everybody to cure these maladies. For instance, the parents accelerate time bond in upbringing children by providing fruits, vegetables and other nutrients rich diets rather than junk food and families should take strict actions if they demand it. Secondly, governments aid to healthy awareness camps. Thus, promoting more hygienic diet helps to disinfect from certain chronic diseases. To conclude, eating clean and hygienic food intake prevents from diseases and ameliorate the growth of sustainability of humans despite of preserved food that are dangerous with certain aspects,

Admittedly
, Obesity is the main concern rapidly
 spawning at an unprecedented rate in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 origin. However
, the adverse consequences of unbalanced lifestyle recognized which are vulnerable to human structure. This essay would discuss the causes of this issue are and what preventive should be taken
 to curb this illness.

It is highly
 likely that unhygienic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 intake is increasing and a threat to digestive system. Firstly
, the quantity of processed or packed You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 is increasing 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?every day
everyday
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of having time constraints. As, both the gender are performing multi task This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 lesser time to perform cooking for themselves owing to having detrimental effect on their entire life Likewise
, diabetics, heart problem and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 more with the increased adoption of sedentary lifestyle. Beside this, the excessive This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of artificial fertilizer by the farmers has severe effect on The character between 'individual' and 's' is an accent character, not a standard apostrophe character. Use "individual’s" (curly apostrophe) or "individual's" (straight apostrophe).individual’sindividual's
individual`s
. Henceforth, the visible effect of unhealthy lifestyle has rectified and causes a great harm to humans.

Is there any solution to resolve this repercussion? Yes, if the proper diets would follow everybody to cure these maladies. For instance
, the parents accelerate time bond in upbringing children by providing fruits, vegetables and other nutrients rich diets rather
 than junk You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 and families should take strict actions if they demand it. Secondly
, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
 aid to healthy awareness camps. Thus
, promoting more hygienic diet This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assists
helps
 to disinfect from certain chronic diseases.

To conclude
, eating clean and hygienic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 intake This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :precludes
prevents
 from diseases and ameliorate the growth of sustainability of humans Did you mean "despite" (or, alternatively, 'in spite of')?despite
despite of
 preserved You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeedcuisinesnackmeatdrinkfoodstuff
food
 that are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hazardousrisky
dangerous
 with certain aspects, 