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In some countries more and more shops are open for longer hours. Positive and negetive effect of this.

In some countries more and more shops are open for longer hours. Positive and negetive effect of this. 15ADG
Shops are open for longer hours in many countries nowadays, so let's discuss the positive and negative side of both. At positive side, this trend has paved the way for many individuals to shop or buy something at the flexible time. If someone is working on a late night shift like me, it allows them to buy goods in odd hours. A second benefit is that, it has increased the employment. If shops are going to be open for longer hours then more staff will be required. For students it will become easy to earn while learning. I mean, in a day time he/she can study and in the evening or night can work. At negative side, it will be an upsurge for government to provide more security. In China, London, New York crime has been increased. If shops are open for the late night then it becomes noisy and it results to mental stress especially in kids. So if we can find a way to control crime and mental stress, there is nothing wrong with it.
Shops
are open for longer hours in
many
countries nowadays,
so
let
's discuss the
positive
and
negative
side of both.

At
positive
side, this trend has paved the way for
many
individuals to
shop
or
buy
something at the flexible time. If someone is working on a late night shift like me, it
allows
them to
buy
goods
in odd hours. A second benefit is that, it has increased the employment. If
shops
are going to be open for longer hours then more staff will
be required
. For
students it
will become easy to earn while learning. I mean, in a day time he/she can study and in the evening or night can work.

At
negative
side, it will be an upsurge for
government
to provide more security. In China, London, New York crime has
been increased
. If
shops
are open for the late night then it becomes noisy and it results to mental
stress
especially
in kids.

So
if we can find a way to control crime and mental
stress
, there is nothing
wrong
with it.
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IELTS essay In some countries more and more shops are open for longer hours. Positive and negetive effect of this.

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