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in some countries, more and more local shops are closing down because many people now shop online. what problems might this cause? what is the best way to solve this issue?

Online shopping has recently increased massively throughout the world, which means quite a few regional shops are facing the risk of closing down. Although problems related to this phenomenon are concernable, there are several viable measures available. The rise of online shopping and the downfall of local shops will lead to various problems. Firstly, the convenience of regional customers will be influenced. If those local stores are being closed down, buyers will not have a chance to try on and get great deals for the products that they would like to purchase. In addition, it is sometimes not easy for online shoppers to make purchases, especially the elderly who are not good at using computers. Finally, regional laborers could lose their jobs due to the lack of employment provided by local shops. Nevertheless, there are several solutions that could address these problems. Firstly, the small shops could adapt and provide online services, which is more convenient for buyers. In fact, if local customers are able to see and check the products which are displayed in the shop, there would be more motivation and reliance for regional buyers to visit and purchase items. Secondly, in order for local shops to maintain and strengthen in the long run, the department of taxation should lower tax for regional stores and impose on online shopping. These supports not only give the owners more opportunities to manage their local shops and also maximize customers' experience. In conclusion,
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shopping has recently increased
massively
throughout the world, which means quite a few
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regional
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are facing the
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of closing down. Although problems related to this phenomenon are
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concernable
, there are several viable measures available.

The rise of
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online
shopping and the downfall of
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local
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shops
will lead to various problems.
Firstly
, the convenience of
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regional
customers will
be influenced
. If those
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local
stores are
being closed
down, buyers will not have a chance to try on and
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get
great deals for the products that they would like to
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purchase
.
In addition
, it is
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sometimes
not easy for
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online
shoppers to
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make
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purchases
,
especially
the elderly who are not
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good
at using computers.
Finally
,
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regional
laborers could lose their jobs due to the lack of employment provided by
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local
shops.

Nevertheless
, there are several solutions that could address these problems.
Firstly
, the
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small
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shops
could adapt and provide
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online
services, which is more convenient for buyers. In fact, if
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local
customers are able to
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see
and
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check
the products which
are displayed
in the
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shop
, there would be more motivation and reliance for
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regional
buyers to visit and
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purchase
items.
Secondly
, in order for
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local
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shops
to maintain and strengthen in the long run, the department of taxation should lower tax for
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regional
stores and impose on
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online
shopping. These supports not
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only
give the owners more opportunities to manage their
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local
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shops
and
also
maximize customers' experience.

In conclusion
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IELTS essay in some countries, more and more local shops are closing down because many people now shop online. what problems might this cause? what is the best way to solve this issue?

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