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In some countries, governments provide payments for unemployed people. How does this impact people? Is this a positive or negative development?

In many nations, the government gives unemployment benefits to its citizens in need. This allows people to make ends meet during difficult times and is largely a positive development. The effect of unemployment is that struggling individuals and families are able to survive challenging periods. A good recent example of this would be the record unemployment rates in the wake of the 2020 Covid-19 pandemic. In the United States alone, millions of workers lost their jobs. Many families live paycheck to paycheck and without government support they might lose their homes or struggle to put food on the table every day. Government money allowed them to persevere in a difficult period and use their time to look for a new job. Depending on the conditions of the payments, they can try to find a quality job rather than settling for the first position offered by a company trying to exploit the leverage of an historic jobless rate. This is largely a positive development because it has wide-reaching effects in society. The one qualification to unemployment benefits is that some individuals will try to take advantage of them and remain jobless while living off government charity. These rare instances aside, society benefits from lifting its most vulnerable citizens out of poverty. Without aid some individuals may turn to illegitimate means of supporting themselves. It is unlikely most would become criminals, but the greater effect would be economic. The unemployed cannot buy products and stimulate the consumer economy. The money the government hands out allows them to keep buying food, going shopping, and props up both large and small businesses. A good economy in turn increases the chances that businesses will begin hiring again and unemployment will decline. In conclusion, unemployment payments are a great boon for those without jobs and benefit the whole of society as well. It is important that unemployment agencies are well-run and strictly regulated to ensure continuance of the crucial social service they provide.
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is that struggling individuals and families are able to survive challenging periods. A
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recent example of this would be the record
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rates in the wake of the 2020 Covid-19 pandemic. In the United States alone, millions of workers lost their
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jobs
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families
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paycheck to paycheck and without
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support they might lose their homes or struggle to put food on the table every day.
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money
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allowed
them to persevere in a difficult period and
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use
their time to look for a new
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job
. Depending on the conditions of the payments, they can try to find a quality
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job
rather
than settling for the
first
position offered by a
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trying to exploit the leverage of an historic jobless rate.

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it has wide-reaching effects in society. The one qualification to
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unemployment
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is that
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some
individuals will try to take advantage of them and remain jobless while living off
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charity. These rare instances aside, society
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benefits
from lifting its most vulnerable citizens out of poverty. Without aid
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individuals may turn to illegitimate means of supporting themselves. It is unlikely most would become criminals,
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the greater effect would be economic. The unemployed cannot
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products and stimulate the consumer economy. The money the
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government
hands out
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allows
them to
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keep
buying food, going shopping, and props up both large and
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small
businesses. A
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good
economy in turn increases the chances that businesses will
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begin
hiring again and
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will decline.

In conclusion
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payments are a great boon for those without
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and
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the whole of society
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. It is
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that
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unemployment
agencies are well-run and
strictly
regulated to ensure continuance of the crucial social service they provide.
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IELTS essay In some countries, governments provide payments for unemployed people. How does this impact people? Is this a positive or negative development?

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