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in some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but other case people choose their own marriage partner discuss both view

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For recent year, almost people in the earth that they select their all life partner but in some countries, people are arranged their marriage by their parent. This is one of the most heated problem in the world and this essay will be the place that I discuss this problem To begin with, when we discuss about the marriage arrangement, there is no doubt that it has been for a long time. In the past, this always happened in the Asia. Although this custom is bad, we must recognize that there is the most indispensable benefit about this one. That is the girls or the boys when they were chosen their partner by their parent, they will have a better life. Almost 90% people suppose that their live have been improved because of the in-law richness. Why I suppose that is the truth because when the parent choose the partner for their son or daughter, they always put the wealthy of the in-law family first, they always want to bring all the good things to their son or daughter. In the other hand, there are some people reject the arrangement marriage and I support for this point. Nobody doubt that the marriage is the agreement between the woman and the man so that there would be the displeasure between 2 people if the arrangement marriage happened without agreement from both sides. Moreover, the world has been developed rapidly and follow that the human thinking has been changed so that there are the majority of people disagree with this one. Furthermore, the freedom also the thing that have a high opinion of people nowadays so that they can choose the partner for their own and real love. In conclusion, although there are many people suppose that arrangement marriage is good, I always believe and support my point that the real love is always the agreement between 2 people and they have their own rights to choose and love someone else without forcing
For recent year, almost
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people
in the earth that they select their all life
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partner
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but
in
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some
countries,
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people
are arranged
their
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marriage
by their parent. This is one of the most heated
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problem
in the world and this essay will be the place that I discuss this
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problem


To
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begin
with, when we
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discuss about the
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marriage
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arrangement
, there is no doubt that it has been for a long time. In the past, this always happened in the Asia. Although this custom is
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bad
, we
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must
recognize that there is the most indispensable benefit about this one.
That is
the girls or the boys when they
were chosen
their
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partner
by their parent, they will have a better life. Almost 90%
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people
suppose that their
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live
have been
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improved
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because
of the in-law richness. Why I suppose
that is
the truth
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because
when the parent
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choose
the
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partner
for their son or daughter, they always put the wealthy of the in-law family
first
, they always want to bring all the
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good
things to their son or daughter.

In the other hand, there are
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some
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people
reject the
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arrangement
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marriage
and I support for this point. Nobody
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doubt
that the
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marriage
is the agreement between the woman and the
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man
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so
that there would be the displeasure between 2
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people
if the
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arrangement
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marriage
happened without agreement from both sides.
Moreover
, the world has
been developed
rapidly
and follow that the human thinking has been
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changed
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so
that there are the
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majority
of
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people
disagree with this one.
Furthermore
, the freedom
also
the thing that have a high opinion of
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people
nowadays
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so
that they can choose the
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partner
for their
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own
and real
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love
.

In conclusion
, although there are
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many
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people
suppose that
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arrangement
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marriage
is
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good
, I always believe and support my point that the real
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love
is always the agreement between 2
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people and
they have their
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own
rights to choose and
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love
someone else without forcing
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IELTS essay in some countries, marriages are arranged by the parents but other case people choose their own marriage partner discuss both view

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  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
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