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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v.1

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1
It is usually believed that in some parts of the world, many people are living alone compared to the past. This essay would argue that this is a positive development because these people prefer to be independent and this helps to reduce the cost of housing. One reason why some people like to live alone as they don’t want their opinions to be restricted by family members. This reduces the stress of having any difference of opinion from housemates and instead the time could be saved to get involved in other activities. To illustrate this, a recent report in The Business Weekly magazine stated that the number of people who live alone indulge them to work out in the gym has increased by 58% because of their free time and thereby resulting in a healthy lifestyle. In the past, the family bonding was given priority because parents were the source of wisdom for their children’, however, this has changed in the contemporary world. Another reason to consider the people living alone is that this reduces the housing cost. This is to say people do not require to invest in buying a luxurious property. A person can either live in a shared apartment or stay in one-bedroom serviced accommodation and this money saved could be used for some other purposes. This eventually reduces the price of the land value in urban areas. For example, The Times reported that the construction of housing buildings was likely to be reduced by 32% due to sharing the flat when compared to a decade ago. In conclusion, many people live alone is beneficial because of the freedom of other members ideas and reduced cost spend on housing.
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some
parts of the world,
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people
are living
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alone
compared to the past. This essay would argue that this is a
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positive
development
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because
these
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people
prefer to be independent and this
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helps
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reduce
the cost of housing.

One reason why
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some
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people
like to
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live
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alone
as they don’t want their opinions to
be restricted
by family members. This
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reduces
the
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stress
of having any difference of opinion from housemates and
instead
the time could
be saved
to
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get
involved in other activities. To illustrate this, a recent report in The Business Weekly magazine stated that the number of
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people
who
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live
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alone
indulge them to work out in the gym has increased by 58%
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because
of their free time and thereby resulting in a healthy lifestyle. In the past, the family bonding was
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given
priority
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because
parents were the source of wisdom for their children’,
however
, this has
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changed
in the contemporary world.

Another reason to consider the
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people
living
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alone
is that this
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reduces
the housing cost. This is to say
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people
do not require
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to invest
in buying a luxurious property. A person can either
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live
in a shared apartment or stay in one-bedroom serviced accommodation and this money saved could be
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used
for
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some
other purposes. This
eventually
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reduces
the price of the land value in urban areas.
For example
, The Times reported that the construction of housing buildings was likely to be
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reduced
by 32% due to sharing the flat when compared to a decade ago.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
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live
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alone
is beneficial
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because
of the freedom of other members
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ideas
and
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reduced
cost spend on housing.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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