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In some countries in the world, health services are free. However, some people feel that smokers should not get free treatment for smoking related illnesses, because they are knowingly harming themselves. Do you agree or disagree with the above statement?

In some countries in the world, health services are free. However, some people feel that smokers should not get free treatment for smoking related illnesses, because they are knowingly harming themselves. Q8MGP
The majority of countries across the world provide health services free of charge. Some health experts contend that people who become ill due to tobacco smoking should bear up their health expenses. However, I firmly believe that they have right to gain health services without paying money due to various circumstances. Health is a basic human need and every person have right to obtain health services equally. It will not be a fair decision to discriminate people based on their health habits or underlying causes to diseases in providing health care facilities because nobody get diseases willingly. In addition, these people may be bread winner of their families. Hence, neglecting those people by the health care sector would put their lives to danger, thereby creating various problems to dependents. Furthermore, smoking is an addiction which is difficult to quite. There are numerous ways to attract people to smoking in the society. Moreover, cigarettes are available in the market where everyone can reach it easily. Adictors need to assistance of health professionals in order to quitting smoking. Additionally, people have been dead considerably due to other reasons such as motor vehicle accidents and become disabled because of careless driving. However, treatments are given freely for them. On the other hand, fumes released to atmosphere by tobacco consuming put passive smokers to danger. It is true that people are educated frequently about negative side effects of smoking. As a result, the individuals should be responsible for their health. In conclusion, it is acceptable that smokers put not only their lives but others live danger also. These cigar-smokers are extra burden to the health care system of any country due to various reason. Although, health as a fundamental need of human, smokers should have equal opportunity to reach to health care facilities similarly to others.
The majority of countries across the world provide
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health
services free of charge.
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Some
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health
experts contend that
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people
who become ill
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due
to tobacco
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smoking
should bear up their
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health
expenses.
However
, I
firmly
believe that they have right to gain
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health
services without paying money
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due
to various circumstances.

Health is a basic human need and every person have right to obtain
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health
services
equally
. It will not be a
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fair
decision to discriminate
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people
based on their
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health
habits or underlying causes to diseases in providing
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health
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care
facilities
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because
nobody
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get
diseases
willingly
.
In addition
, these
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people
may be bread winner of their families.
Hence
, neglecting those
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people
by the
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health
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care
sector would put their
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lives
to
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danger
, thereby creating various problems to dependents.

Furthermore
,
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smoking
is an addiction which is difficult
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to
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quite
. There are numerous ways to attract
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people
to
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smoking
in the society.
Moreover
, cigarettes are available in the market where everyone can reach it
easily
.
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Adictors
need to assistance of
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health
professionals in order to
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quitting
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smoking
.
Additionally
,
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people
have been dead
considerably
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due
to
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other
reasons such as motor vehicle accidents and become disabled
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because
of careless driving.
However
, treatments are
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given
freely
for them.

On the
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other
hand, fumes released to atmosphere by tobacco consuming put passive smokers to
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danger
. It is true that
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people
are educated
frequently
about
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negative
side effects of
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smoking
.
As a result
, the individuals should be responsible for their health.

In conclusion
, it is acceptable that smokers put not
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only
their
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lives
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but
others
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live
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danger
also
. These cigar-smokers are extra burden to the
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health
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care
system of any country
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due
to various reason. Although,
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health
as a fundamental need of human, smokers should have equal opportunity to reach to
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health
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care
facilities
similarly
to others.
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IELTS essay In some countries in the world, health services are free. However, some people feel that smokers should not get free treatment for smoking related illnesses, because they are knowingly harming themselves.

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