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In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

Increasing local incomes and decreasing gapping of social are occurred, being the benefits if the government offers businesses to replace to rural areas. However, those have the negative in controversy of local people' land and natural sources. Displacement of industries and businesses to remote areas from big city leads to increase local income, making prosperous society. That is to say, if there are some new infrastructure buildings, needing employees, those owners will take from local people, although those buildings are more likely to lead land disputes with local communities. For instance, in the last ten years in Serdang Bedagai North Sumatra, 3 food factories and 2 well-known clothing businesses require more than 1, 000 workers, and most business owners are looking for local employees, as well as many local residents are setting up restaurants around the company. Thus, they obtain an increase in earnings. In addition, social inequality will disappear with equal distribution of jobs if the authority recommends businesses to redeploy their location to suburban areas. This is because the equal distribution of community welfare is realized evenly in the villages, although the exploitation of natural resources in rural areas will occur. For example, in Samosir island North Sumatra, the poverty in there had started to decrease around 80% due to many visitors getting holiday since many tourism locations were built in 2010 compared to Medan, having more tourism locations. Therefore, people in there had the permanent livelihoods to fulfill their daily needs. In conclusion, the positive impacts from businesses moving to remote areas are rising incomes and discrepancy of local people, while those have disadvantages with unpleasantness' owners and enviroment. Can the government maintain those benefits over time?
Increasing
local
incomes and decreasing gapping of social
are occurred
, being the benefits if the
government
offers
businesses
to replace to rural
areas
.
However
, those have the
negative
in controversy of
local
people
' land and natural sources.

Displacement of industries and
businesses
to remote
areas
from
big
city leads to increase
local
income, making prosperous society.
That is
to say, if there are
some
new infrastructure buildings, needing employees, those owners will take from
local
people
, although those buildings are more likely to lead land disputes with
local
communities.
For instance
, in the last ten years in
Serdang
Bedagai
North Sumatra, 3 food factories and 2 well-known clothing
businesses
require more than 1, 000 workers, and most
business
owners are looking for
local
employees,
as well
as
many
local
residents are setting up restaurants around the
company
.
Thus
, they obtain an increase in earnings.

In addition
, social inequality will disappear with equal distribution of jobs if the authority recommends
businesses
to redeploy their location to suburban
areas
. This is
because
the equal distribution of community welfare
is realized
evenly
in the villages, although the exploitation of natural resources in rural
areas
will occur.
For example
, in
Samosir
island North Sumatra, the poverty in there had
started
to decrease around 80% due to
many
visitors getting holiday since
many
tourism locations
were built
in 2010 compared to Medan, having more tourism locations.
Therefore
,
people
in there had the permanent livelihoods to fulfill their daily needs.

In conclusion
, the
positive
impacts from
businesses
moving to remote
areas
are rising incomes and discrepancy of
local
people
, while those have disadvantages with unpleasantness' owners and
enviroment
. Can the
government
maintain those benefits over time?
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IELTS essay In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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