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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. 6x6XK
Consuming fast food causes health problems to many people in a lot of countries. Some governments take measures such as imposing a higher tax but is it really necessary? Personally, there are more working ways of stopping people of eating food like this. Looking at the fast food we can see only drawbacks. It causes many problems like overweight and addiction. A friend of mine really liked eating it. She used to consume this type of food four times per week for almost two years. Eventually she developed a heart problem and had to change her diet. Fast food restaurants such as Mcdonalds and KFC use frozen and high fat products. They attract more customers with advertisings, discounts and even toys for the children. They try to get as much clients as possible, although their products are highly hazardours. In my view, increasing the fast food tax would not change much. People will still buy it even though it is expensive. There are other manners such as special health classes in schools which introduce the healthy way of living. Also the governments can restrict the working hours of these businesses which will make people find another solution for eating. To fight with the health deseases caused by the fast food, the governments can introduce to the population more sports activities and give bonuses like discounts or even free healthy food for the people who decide to participate. Personally, this will be the right way of preventing the people from this dangerous food. In conclusion the rapid increase of buying fast food should go to the end. The governments should find what suit them and put some effort in stopping this kind of a problem
Consuming
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causes health
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problems
to
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many
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people
in
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a lot of
countries.
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Some
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governments
take measures such as imposing a higher tax
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but
is it
really
necessary?
Personally
, there are more working ways of stopping
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people
of eating
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food
like this.

Looking at the
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fast
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food
we can
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see
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only
drawbacks. It causes
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many
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problems
like overweight and addiction. A friend of mine
really
liked eating it. She
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used
to consume this type of
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food
four times per week for almost two years.
Eventually
she developed a heart
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problem
and had to
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change
her diet.
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Fast
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food
restaurants such as
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Mcdonalds
and KFC
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use
frozen and high
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fat
products. They attract more customers with
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advertisings
, discounts and even toys for the children. They try to
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get
as
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much
clients as possible, although their products are
highly
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hazardours
.

In my view, increasing the
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fast
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food
tax would not
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change
much.
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People
will
still
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buy
it
even though
it is expensive. There are other manners such as special health classes in schools which introduce the healthy way of living.
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Also
the
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governments
can restrict the working hours of these businesses which will
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make
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people
find another solution for eating. To fight with the health
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deseases
caused by the
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fast
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food
, the
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governments
can introduce to the population more sports activities and give bonuses like discounts or even free healthy
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food
for the
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people
who decide to participate.
Personally
, this will be the right way of preventing the
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people
from this
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dangerous
food.

In conclusion
the rapid increase of buying
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fast
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food
should go to the
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end
. The
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governments
should find what suit them and put
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some
effort in stopping this
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problem
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IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food.

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283 words
5.5
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