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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work? m1bJn
Primary education is important for childern's life which plays vital role in their general development. In european countries, some of them believe that childern should learn practical skills in the age of 11 or 13, where as other wants to provide more generalized education. I believe that one should consider both for thier future growth. Indeed, practical skills are important in order to secure their future to placed in best carrier jobs. In my opinion, school should focus on overall education which helps to develop childern's knowledge. For example, communication is important to build up personality. Thus it is important to have such classes compulsory for high school which will improve learning ability. However, we must consider that not all children are education oriented. It is best to encourage them to to start leaning vocational skills in early age. If such students have ability where they can grasp easily, than we must give start so that they have enough time to explore their field. In addition, shcool can arrange corporate intern ship for higher classes where they can get real time experience. Also, interactive games with younger childer helps to teach life skills like team work that they will use it their carrier. In my opinion, shool can take such steps to prepare pupiles for academic education with some sort of practical skills, which will help them to stand in corporate world. Teachers must provide blend of life skills and vocational training programs, which shows an individuals personality in job market.
Primary
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european
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some
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childern
should learn practical
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skills
in the age of 11 or 13,
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where as
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education
. I believe that one should consider both for
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thier
future growth.

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skills
are
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important
in order to secure their future to placed
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in best
carrier jobs. In my opinion, school should focus on
overall
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education
which
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helps
to develop
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childern
's knowledge.
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, communication is
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important
to build up personality.
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it is
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important
to have such classes compulsory for high school which will
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improve
learning ability.

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, we
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must
consider that not all children are
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education
oriented. It is best to encourage them
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to to
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start
leaning vocational
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skills
in early age. If such students have ability where they can grasp
easily
,
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than
we
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start
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that they have
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enough
time to explore their field.
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,
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shcool
can arrange corporate intern ship for higher classes where they can
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get
real time experience.
Also
, interactive games with younger
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childer
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helps
to teach life
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skills
like team work that they will
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use
it their carrier.

In my opinion,
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shool
can take such steps to prepare
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pupiles
for academic
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education
with
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some
sort of practical
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skills
, which will
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help
them to stand in corporate world. Teachers
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must
provide blend of life
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skills
and vocational training programs, which
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shows
an
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individuals
personality in job market.
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IELTS essay In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work?

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