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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result eating too much fast food . It is therefore necessary for governments impose a higher tax on this kind of food . To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion? 5Xxp
Fast food has been one of the most consumed foods nowadays. As it has been easily available and takes less time to prepare, most of us prefer to have it as a lunch, dinner or both. As a result of more consumption of such foods, People are becoming unhealthy and suffering from both treatable and untreatable diseases. I partially agreed to a point that the government should increase the tax on fast food. This essay will justify the points, why or why not tax should be imposed on such foods. Firstly, supporting the government's higher tax will help to reduce the intake of fast food. Eating a higher amount of unhealthy food had lead to many diseases such as obesity, heart disease, arthritis, diabetes, and so on. This disease has also resulted in low life expectancy and increased cost of health maintenance. For example, according to one study, the rate of bariatric surgery has increased due to obesity, resulting from a high intake of fatty foods. Besides this, fast food has also made humans lazy and least concerned about a healthy diet. On the other hand, besides the above-mentioned points, fast food has also helped lots of people for example homeless people are dependent on such food as they can easily afford it. so if the tax on fast food is increased it will directly affect All the people who are forced to feed themself and their families. Furthermore, the rise in tax may not be an issue for the one who has a good income. So to some extend fast food has helped the homeless and jobless to eliminate their hunger as it is cheaper to buy. So government should have both visions before taking these rules into action. In conclusion, fast food has both benefits and drawbacks. Therefore the government should think of both consequences before increasing the tax on fast foods.
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has been one of the most consumed
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nowadays. As it has been
easily
available and takes less time to prepare, most of us prefer to have it as a lunch, dinner or both.
As a result
of more consumption of such
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foods
,
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People
are becoming unhealthy and suffering from both treatable and untreatable
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diseases
. I
partially
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agreed
to a point that the
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government
should increase the
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tax
on
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fast
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. This essay will justify the points, why or why not
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tax
should
be imposed
on such foods.

Firstly
, supporting the
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government
's higher
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tax
will
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help
to
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reduce
the intake of
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fast
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food
. Eating a higher amount of unhealthy
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food
had lead to
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many
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diseases
such as obesity, heart
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disease
, arthritis, diabetes, and
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so
on. This
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disease
has
also
resulted in low life expectancy and increased cost of health maintenance.
For example
, according to one study, the rate of bariatric surgery has increased due to obesity, resulting from a high intake of fatty foods.

Besides
this,
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fast
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has
also
made humans lazy and least concerned about a healthy diet.

On the other hand
,
besides
the above-mentioned points,
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has
also
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helped
lots of
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people
for example
homeless
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people
are dependent on such
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food
as they can
easily
afford it.
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so
if the
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tax
on
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fast
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food
is increased
it will
directly
affect All the
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people
who
are forced
to feed
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themself
and their families.
Furthermore
, the rise in
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tax
may not be an issue for the one who has a
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good
income.
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has
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helped
the homeless and jobless to eliminate their hunger as it is cheaper to
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buy
.
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So
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government
should have both visions
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before
taking these
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rules
into action.

In conclusion
,
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has both benefits and drawbacks.
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Therefore
the
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government
should
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think
of both consequences
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before
increasing the
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tax
on
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fast
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foods
.
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IELTS essay In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments impose a higher tax on this kind of food. with this opinion?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
314 words
6.0
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