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In some countries,a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is a good for a country,while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount propel can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is a good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount propel can earn. RN2DQ
It is irrefutable that in myriad nations, a number of multitudes, obtain astronomical wage. Owing to which, few people ascertain that it is a boon for the nation. Although, other postulate that authority should cap remuneration to maintain equality between all. I am not supporting this notion and I will scrutinize both perspectives in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, giving handsome salary to the employees, creates a numerous perks for the growth of nation as well as people also get encouragement and become industrious to achieve high triumph in life. To explicate, individuals who belongs to low-income families always take an inspiration from the affluent people about how to achieve a success in life with hardwork. To epitome, if the administration provide same salary to all people, hardworker donot put any effort, become disappointed and cannot do higher studies. Hence, the curiosity of achieving something in life is diminsh. On the other hand, by capping the salary, the disparity among people is alleviated. To justify, nowadays, the difference in rich and poor is incline. Due to which, wealthy people become more richer and impoverish become ten times more poverty-stricken. However, with this step of government, the discrimination among them will fall down. To exemplify, with equal opportunities, all people reside a same life without the feeling of inferiority. Thence, the disequality is plummet. In compendium, I would like to ingeminate that nodoubt that with limiting the salary of employees, authority should demolish the injustice between people. Despite of this, high wage motivate the people and they will contribute more for economic growth.
It is irrefutable that in myriad nations, a number of multitudes, obtain astronomical wage. Owing to which, few
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people
ascertain that it is a boon for the nation.
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Although
, other postulate that authority should cap remuneration to maintain equality between all. I am not supporting this notion and I will scrutinize both perspectives in the forthcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, giving handsome
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salary
to the employees, creates a numerous
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perks
for the growth of nation
as well
as
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people
also
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get
encouragement and
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become
industrious to achieve high triumph in
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life
. To explicate, individuals who
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belongs
to low-income families always take an inspiration from the affluent
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people
about how to achieve a success in
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life
with
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hardwork
. To epitome, if the administration provide same
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salary
to all
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people
,
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hardworker
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donot
put any effort,
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become
disappointed and cannot do higher studies.
Hence
, the curiosity of achieving something in
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life
is
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diminsh
.

On the other hand
, by capping the
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salary
, the disparity among
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people
is alleviated
. To justify, nowadays, the difference in rich and poor is incline. Due to which, wealthy
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people
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become
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more richer
and impoverish
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become
ten times more poverty-stricken.
However
, with this step of
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government
, the discrimination among them will fall down. To exemplify, with equal opportunities, all
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people
reside a same
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life
without the feeling of inferiority. Thence, the
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disequality
is plummet.

In compendium, I would like to
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ingeminate
that
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nodoubt
that with limiting the
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salary
of employees, authority should demolish the injustice between
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people
.
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Despite of
this, high wage motivate the
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people and
they will contribute more for economic growth.
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IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is a good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount propel can earn.

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