Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a while others country, believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a while others country, believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Jg56
As everyone knows, in various contries defferences between salaries can differ from others countries. In our world in some countries people have an opportunity high to earn salaries. Because of these phenomena, there are a lot of opinions. One group of people believe that there is not any harm for counry, others consider that authorities should change the situation. Usually, there are not counries with least amount of money in treasury, which can pay high salaries for their population. That is why paying a large number of money can be afforded only in rich countries. Moreover, residents of these countries have a hicher living wage than others, that have a good influence on economy and hapiness of people at all. For example, the richiest country in the world, which called United Arab Emirates, use all their money for people, who live there. On the other hand, if goverment control flow of money, which society like salaries, they they pay can allow themselves to spend this money for other needs like improving international economy, building more facilities for tourists and others. It can aid country to develope their income from international attitudes. For instance, authorities of Holland decided to focus on improving industrial areas and tourism. In my point of view, both sides are very controversial. However, as for if me, country can spend more attention for their residents, they should do it. Because only humans in the country can tell more about their homeland than any economy or places there. In conclusion, a lot of people argue about these circumstances all over the world. Perhaps, there will not one opinion in near future. But only people who live in this country can tell others which situation they like more.
As everyone knows, in various
Possible spelling mistake found.
contries
Possible spelling mistake found.
defferences
between
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salaries
can differ from others
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
. In our world in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
have an opportunity high to earn
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salaries
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of these phenomena, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
opinions. One group of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
believe that there is not any harm for
Possible spelling mistake found.
counry
, others consider that authorities should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
the situation.

Usually
, there are not
Possible spelling mistake found.
counries
with
A determiner is probably missing here: "the least".
least
amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
in treasury, which can pay high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salaries
for their population.
That is
why paying
Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use "many" or "numerous"
a large number of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
can
be afforded
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
in rich
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
.
Moreover
, residents of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
have a
Possible spelling mistake found.
hicher
living wage than others, that have a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
influence on economy and
Possible spelling mistake found.
hapiness
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
at all.
For example
, the
Possible spelling mistake found.
richiest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
in the world, which called United Arab Emirates,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
all their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
, who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
there.

On the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
hand, if
Possible spelling mistake found.
goverment
control flow of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
, which society like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
salaries
,
Possible typo: you repeated a word
they they
pay can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
themselves to spend this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
needs like improving international economy, building more facilities for tourists
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
and others
. It can aid
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
to
Possible spelling mistake found.
develope
their income from international attitudes.
For instance
, authorities of Holland decided to focus on improving industrial areas and tourism.

In my point of view, both sides are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
controversial.
However
, as for if me,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
can spend more attention for their residents, they should do it.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
humans in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
more about their homeland than any economy or places there.

In conclusion
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
argue about these circumstances all over the world. Perhaps, there
Please check the order of words and the punctuation of this sentence!
will not one
opinion in near future.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
others which situation they like more.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a while others country, believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a while others country, believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.