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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about the law v.20

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about the law v. 20
The law imposed not to allow the teenagers without an adult during the night hours, ensures the safety of the guy. It is accepted by the majority population, because the crime rate is high at night and at the same time, some people stand against the law. It could be implemented all over the US states, which will drastically reduce the unlawful things. At the young age, everyone tempted to try new things and people are aggressive. They also like the night life, like spending so many hours at the pub, a guy or a girl spare time with their loved ones, which are not known by their parents. As an example, i can explain you a real life story, George was my college mate and he stayed in a hostel during his studies at Apollo college, California. He is habituated to escape from the hostel during night hours, spending time with the bad people and one day, he gets caught by the police. He was in the jail for a week, as a disciplinary action. Later, he realized his fault, but lost his academics. It is always a right idea, to keep young people under monitoring and accompanied by an adult could provide them safety as well as discipline. On the other hand, they will lose their privacy. Teenagers always wanted to try new things, someone always accompanying us is a kind of annoying action, nobody accepts particularly students. As a student's point of view, the law should be demolished, since they think it is an old age regulation. Finally, in my opinion, everyone in the country should be safe and it is government's responsibility to ensure the safety. It could not be based on the age, because the victim can be of any age and law should be updated with a few changes, that need to be consulted with the local public.
The
law
imposed not to
allow
the
teenagers
without an adult during the
night
hours, ensures the safety of the guy. It is
accepted
by the majority population,
because
the crime rate is high at
night
and at the same time,
some
people
stand against the
law
. It could
be implemented
all over the US states, which will
drastically
reduce
the unlawful things.

At the young
age
, everyone tempted to try new things and
people
are aggressive. They
also
like the
night life
, like spending
so
many
hours at the pub, a guy or a girl spare time with their
loved
ones, which are not known by their parents. As an example,
i
can
explain
you a real life story, George was my college
mate and
he stayed in a hostel during his studies at Apollo college, California. He
is habituated
to escape from the hostel during
night
hours, spending time with the
bad
people
and one day, he
gets
caught by the police. He was in the jail for a week, as a disciplinary action. Later, he realized his fault,
but
lost his academics. It is always a right
idea
, to
keep
young
people
under monitoring and accompanied by an adult could provide them safety
as well
as discipline.

On the other hand
, they will lose their privacy.
Teenagers
always wanted to try new things, someone always accompanying us is a kind of annoying action, nobody accepts
particularly
students. As a student's point of view, the
law
should
be demolished
, since they
think
it is an
old
age
regulation.

Finally
, in my opinion, everyone in the country should be safe and it is
government
's responsibility to ensure the safety. It could not
be based
on the
age
,
because
the victim can be of any
age
and
law
should
be updated
with a few
changes
, that need to
be consulted
with the local public.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about the law v. 20

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