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In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. What has caused this ? What solutions can you sugges?

In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. What has caused this? What solutions can you sugges? awArm
It must be accepted that nowadays, there has been a significant increase in episodes of offences committed by the young especially in the urban areas. This is a fearful situation. There are many reasons for such a situation; however, a few productive suggestions can solve the situation to a large extent. The causes and the measures are discussed further. Examining the reasons, the most common is to live up and enjoy the glamour of the big city. It has been observed that young people get easily obsessed by all the pleasures of the urban life such as the discos, the clubs and other fun attractions. For this they need money and so to earn fast bucks, they commit crime. The other prime reason is drugs and alcohol. Commit crime out of a strong desire to fulfil their habits. Poverty and unemployment in this age group are another driving forces for the offences. However, a few measures can really help to overcome the situation. The most important step is to keep strict vigilance at public places and place of entertainment. Closed circuit cameras, more police force, special police patrolling at night, for instance, can effectively help to reduce criminal activities. Another suggestion is to try and bifurcate the youth energy constructively, by organising events such as dance competitions, treasure hunts, marathons and other fulfilled activities. Creating more part time jobs and raising education level among the young people can also help in a large way to reduce crime by the young. All in all, it can be said that certainly there are swelling numbers of crime in the meteors and cities. To live up to the glamour and earn fast money – young people commit crime. However, strict vigilance and bifurcating youth energy can help remedy the situation. I believe, this debate must be considered on a serious note.
It
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accepted
that nowadays, there has been a significant increase in episodes

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of
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offences
committed by the
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young
especially
in the urban areas. This is a fearful situation.

There are
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many
reasons for such a
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situation
;
however
, a few productive suggestions can solve

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the
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situation
to a large extent. The causes and the measures
are discussed
further
.

Examining the reasons, the most common is to
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live
up and enjoy the glamour of the

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big
city. It has
been observed
that
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young
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people
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get
easily
obsessed by all the pleasures of
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the


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urban
life such as the discos, the clubs and other fun attractions. For this they need
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money


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and
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so
to earn
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fast
bucks, they commit
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crime
. The other prime reason is drugs and alcohol.

Commit
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crime
out of a strong desire to fulfil their habits. Poverty and unemployment in
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this


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age
group are another driving forces for the
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offences
.

However
, a few measures can
really
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help
to overcome the
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situation
. The
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most


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important
step is to
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keep
strict vigilance at public places and place of entertainment. Closed

circuit cameras, more police force, special police patrolling at night,
for instance
, can

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effectively
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help
to
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reduce
criminal activities. Another suggestion is to
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try and
bifurcate
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the


youth energy
constructively
, by
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organising
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events
such as dance competitions, treasure hunts,

marathons and other fulfilled activities. Creating more
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part time
jobs and raising
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education


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level
among the
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young
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people
can
also
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help
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in a large way
to
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reduce
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crime
by the young.

All in all, it can
be said
that
certainly
there are swelling numbers of
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crime
in the

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meteors
and cities. To
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live
up to the glamour and earn
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fast
money
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–
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young
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people
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commit


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crime
.
However
, strict vigilance and bifurcating youth energy can
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help
remedy the
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situation
. I

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believe
, this debate
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must
be considered
on a serious note.
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IELTS essay In recent years, there has been a considerable rise in crimes committed by young people in cities. What has caused this? What solutions can you sugges?

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