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In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

It is a very shocking situation that the number of youngsters involved in crime is increasing day by day. In this essay, I intend to discuss the reasons for this phenomenon and suggest some solutions. A number of factors are responsible for juvenile delinquency. Media is one powerful influence. Many times, vulgarity and violence is shown on TV. Children are vulnerable and accept it as natural and try to copy what is shown. For example, in Virginia USA, a student killed 30 students just after watching a TV program. Another cause of crime among youth is the changing family structure. Nuclear families are the norm of the day. Earlier, there were joint families in which grandparents used to teach moral values to children. They kept an eye on the friend circle of their grandchildren. Nowadays, both parents are working and children are left unattended at home. They may fall into bad company and resort to drugs under peer pressure. For drugs they desperately need money which turns them towards crime. Furthermore, increasing poverty, unemployment and competition is causing hopelessness and frustration among the youth. They are over ambitious and want to earn quick money. They have a lot of energy and if that energy is not harnessed in the right direction, they can go astray. Consumerist society is also a big factor to put them on the path of crime. When they see new things in the market, they want them by hook or by crook. Parents cannot satisfy all their whims and so they start doing petty crime which turns to major crime very soon. The solutions are not simple. The issue has to be dealt with on a war footing. Some censorship of TV channels is needed. Parents should ration the TV viewing hours of children. Parents should watch TV with children so that they know what their children are being exposed to. We should also encourage joint families. Parents should be good role models Good family atmosphere should be provided to children. Friend circle of the children should be monitored. We should also educate children about the harms of consumerism. Schools should also provide good education. Finally, government should try and reduce unemployment and poverty which are the root causes. To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that, crime among youth is a big problem and youth alone cannot be blamed for that. We should look into the causes and take relevant steps to fight this problem. In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people
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of youngsters involved in
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is increasing

day by day. In this essay, I intend to discuss the reasons for this phenomenon and suggest

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some
solutions.

A
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number
of factors are responsible for juvenile delinquency. Media is one powerful

influence.
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Many
times, vulgarity and violence
is shown
on TV.
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Children
are vulnerable and

accept it as natural and try to copy what
is shown
.
For example
, in Virginia USA, a student

killed 30 students
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just
after watching a TV program. Another cause of
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crime
among youth is

the changing
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family
structure. Nuclear
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families
are the norm of the day. Earlier, there were

joint
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families
in which grandparents
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used
to teach moral values to
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children
. They
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kept
an

eye on the friend circle of their grandchildren. Nowadays, both
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parents
are working and

children are
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left
unattended at home. They may fall into
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bad
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company
and resort to drugs

under peer pressure. For
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drugs they
desperately
need money which turns them towards

crime.

Furthermore
, increasing poverty, unemployment and competition is causing hopelessness

and frustration among the youth. They are over ambitious and want to earn quick money.

They have
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a lot of
energy and if that energy is not harnessed in the right direction, they can

go astray. Consumerist society is
also
a
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big
factor to put them on the path of
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crime
. When

they
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see
new things in the market, they want them by hook or by crook.
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Parents
cannot

satisfy all their
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whims and
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so
they
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start
doing petty
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crime
which turns to major
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crime
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very


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soon
.

The solutions are not simple. The issue
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has to
be dealt
with on a war footing.
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Some


censorship of TV channels
is needed
.
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Parents
should ration the TV viewing hours of children.

Parents should
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watch
TV with
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children
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so
that they know what their
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children
are
being exposed
to. We should
also
encourage joint
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families
.
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Parents
should be
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good
role models

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Good
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family
atmosphere should
be provided
to
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children
. Friend circle of the
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children
should

be monitored
. We should
also
educate
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children
about the harms of consumerism. Schools

should
also
provide
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good
education.
Finally
,
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government
should try and
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reduce


unemployment and poverty which are the root causes.

To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that,
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crime
among youth is a
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big
problem and

youth alone cannot
be blamed
for that. We should look into the causes and take relevant

steps to fight this problem.

In
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recent
years, the
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of
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crimes
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young
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young
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people


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recent
years, the
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crimes
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young
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recent
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IELTS essay In recent years, the number of crimes committed by young people in major cities throughout the world is increasing. Discuss this issue. Give reasons and suggest some solutions.

Essay
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11 paragraphs
456 words
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