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In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative? In the last decades, an original form of family undergo through the transformations, as well as the responsibilities of a particular member of the family. Nowadays, the members of a modern family have equal rights, therefore, neither husband nor wife is not susceptible to mental diseases, hence it contributes to lead a healthy life. In view of these facts, I believe that a contemporary view toward the new modified model of family is more progressive and effective. It will be proven by ideas from my own knowledge. Firstly, it becomes harder to survive in the modern world for young families, where only one member brings the home bacon. The world is altering and with the conservative way of distribution of roles where the wife takes a role as only just a housewife and the husband makes money is tough to keep the family in acceptable conditions. When the modern view allows working for every member of the family it is a piece of cake to stay in well-being. Secondly, the contemporary standard of the family lets to the wives lead ana active life and be engaged in self-development. While in the past, they were prohibited to attend any of activities, even an education was inaccessible to them. Thus the wives of the past period lived in unacceptable conditions, which could lead to serious mental problems. Therefore, the transformed family structure allows the wives to be an active part of society. In view of everything, I highlighted the main reasons, we can claim that a new way of thinking about the roles of family members and its model has a great positive effect and helps to lead a healthy lifestyle for both husband and wife.
In recent years, the
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structure has
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. What are the
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occurring? Do you
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think
these
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In the last decades, an original form of
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family
undergo through the transformations,
as well
as the responsibilities of a particular
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member
of the
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family
. Nowadays, the
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members
of a modern
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family
have equal rights,
therefore
, neither husband nor wife is not susceptible to mental diseases,
hence
it contributes to
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lead
a healthy life. In
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view
of these facts, I believe that a contemporary
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view
toward the new modified model of
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family
is more progressive and effective. It will
be proven
by
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ideas
from my
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own
knowledge.

Firstly
, it becomes harder to survive in the modern world for young
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families
, where
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only
one
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member
brings the home bacon. The world is altering and with the conservative way of distribution of
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roles
where the wife takes a
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role
as
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only
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just
a housewife and the husband
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makes
money is tough to
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keep
the
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family
in acceptable conditions. When the modern
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view
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allows
working for every
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member
of the
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family
it is a piece of cake to stay in well-being.

Secondly
, the contemporary standard of the
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family
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lets
to the wives
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lead
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active life and
be engaged
in self-development. While in the past, they
were prohibited
to attend any of activities, even an education was inaccessible to them.
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Thus
the wives of the past period
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lived
in unacceptable conditions, which could
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lead
to serious mental problems.
Therefore
, the transformed
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family
structure
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allows
the wives to be an active part of society.

In
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view
of everything, I highlighted the main reasons, we can claim that a new way of thinking about the
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roles
of
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family
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members
and its model has a great
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positive
effect and
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helps
to
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lead
a healthy lifestyle for both husband and wife.
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IELTS essay In recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occurring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
311 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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