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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development? 3KLb

A number of local brick-and-mortar stores have closed lately because consumers prefer shopping in large malls increasingly more. Even though in theory smaller shops have the opportunity to move to malls, in reality it is not possible for them to sustain ruthless competition there, which brings the national economy to the brink of failure in the long run. The real estate market is saturated with huge shiny shopping malls that have proved to yield record profits compared to traditional local shops. It is for the reason that malls offer a much more streamlined shopping experience to consumers - allowing to make various kinds of purchases in one place without travelling across the city. However, with this seemingly advantageous opportunity customers are also manipulated by the carefully curated atmosphere in shopping centres that coaxes them into buying much more than planned or needed. Take a standard mall as an example - one can usually find there a food court, attractions for children, a long array of boutiques and a cinema only to entice consumers to stay longer and spend more. At the same time, conventional stores constitute the basis of the national economy, providing possibilities of self-realization for entrepreneurs who otherwise would not want to be regularly employed by a corporation. Furthermore, should consumers seek a diverse choice of products, it is not a good idea to shop in a mall where merchandise looks very similar across major brands. To illustrate, brick-and-mortar stores offer niche items that are much less likely to be worn by the majority of citizens like Zara clothes. In conclusion, there has been a negative trend for trade monopolisation because of the worsening rivalry local shops have to face from large brands. Hence, the closure of high street stores will result in consumers having to spend overall more money on shopping, while not necessarily being provided with a larger choice of goods.

A number of local brick-and-mortar You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstock
stores
 have closed lately This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerbuyerusershopperpurchaser
consumers
 prefer You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 in large You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
malls
increasingly
 more. Even though
 in theory smaller You use this word too often, consider replacing it withemporiumdepartment storechainboutiquemarketoutlet
shops
 have the opportunity to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
malls
, in reality it is not possible for them to sustain ruthless competition there, which brings the national economy to the brink of failure in the long run.

The real estate market is saturated
 with huge shiny You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
malls
 that have proved to yield record profits compared to traditional local You use this word too often, consider replacing it withemporiumdepartment storechainboutiquemarketoutlet
shops
. It is for the reason that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
malls
 offer a much more streamlined You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
 experience to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerbuyerusershopperpurchaser
consumers
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-
 allowing to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 various kinds of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquires
purchases
 in one place without travelling across the city. However
, with this seemingly
 advantageous opportunity customers are also
 manipulated by the carefully
 curated atmosphere in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
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centres
 that coaxes them into buying much more than planned or needed. Take a standard You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
mall
 as an example Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.—
-
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only
 to entice You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerbuyerusershopperpurchaser
consumers
 to stay longer and spend more.

At the same time, conventional You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstock
stores
 constitute the basis of the national economy, providing possibilities of self-realization for entrepreneurs who otherwise
 would not want to be regularly
 employed by a corporation. Furthermore
, should You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerbuyerusershopperpurchaser
consumers
 seek a diverse choice of products, it is not a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtconceptnotion
idea
 to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withemporiumdepartment storechainboutiquemarketoutlet
shop
 in a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withshopping centerplazamarketshopping mall
mall
 where merchandise looks This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 similar across major brands. To illustrate, brick-and-mortar You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstock
stores
 offer niche items that are much less likely to be worn
 by the majority of citizens like Zara clothes.

In conclusion
, there has been a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 trend for trade Possible spelling mistake. 'monopolisation' is British English.monopolization
monopolisation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of the worsening rivalry local You use this word too often, consider replacing it withemporiumdepartment storechainboutiquemarketoutlet
shops
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 face from large brands. Hence
, the closure of high street You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstock
stores
 will result in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcustomerbuyerusershopperpurchaser
consumers
 having to spend overall
 more money on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withspendinge-commercebrowsing
shopping
, while not necessarily
being provided
 with a larger choice of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
. 