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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.6

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. v. 6
IT IS OFTEN BELIEVED THAT CHILDREN HAVE THE CAPACITY TO CHANGE THE WORLD WITH THEIR INNOVATIVE IDEAS. HENCE, CERTAIN PEOPLE THINK THAT YOUTH IS THE PERFECT FOR SUCH AUTHORITY POSITIONS LIKE, CALECTOR. WHERE AS, REST OF THE FOLKS SAYS THAT IT IS NOT PREFERABLE TO PROVIDE A REGIE PLACE TO THE YOUTH. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUS THE PRIME PROS OF GIVING SUCH PLACE TO AN ADULT CIVILIAN AND SECONDLY, CONSEQUENCES OF THE SAME. LASTLY, STATE MY OPINION TO SUPPORT THE IDEA OF YPUNGER PEOPLE AT HIGHER POSITION IN THE REGIME OFFICE. ON THE ONE HAND, IF YOUTH RULE THE GOVERNMENT OFFICES, THE WORKFORCE COULD BE EXPECTED AS DOUBLE THAN OLDER WORKERS. THIS MAY LEADS TO IMPROVE THE ECONOMICAL STATUS OF THE TERRITORY AS THE YOUNGER EMPLOYEE HAS AN ABILITY TO WORK FASTER THAN AGED EMPLOYEEDUE TO THE HIGH ENERGY AND STRENTH. FOR EXAMPLE, INDIAN MILETRY DATA SHOWED THAT THEY ARE ONLY HIRING PEOPLE WHO ARE UNDER 18 TO 22 YEAR OF AGE, BECAUSE ADULT HAS MORE STRENGTH AND STEMINA TO RUNE AND FIGHT AND HAVE QUICK CRITICAL THINKING AS WELL. ON THE OTHER HAND, THE MAJOR CONS OF THIS IDEA IS THE MISUNDERSTANDING AND LACK OF EXPERIENCEOF THE YOUNGER EMPLOYEE AT GOVERNENT THAT COULD PUT THEM IN TO THE DETRIMENTAL SITUATION. AT THE END THEY MIGHT DECLINE THEIR SELF CONFIDENCE, WHICH IS NOT A GREAT. CONSEQUENTLY, THEY HAVE THEIR ENTIRE LIFE AHEAD TO LIVE AND TO ACHIVE ACHOMPLISHMENT FUTHER. HOWEVR, IF THEY HAVE THE PROPER SUPPORT FROM EXPERIENCED PEOPLE AND HAVE PERFECT TRAING THEN ON ONE CAN STOPE THEM TO ACHIEVE THE SUCCESS AT A VERY YOUNG. FOR INSTANCE, INDIAN YOUNG POLITICIAN ARE NOT WORTH FOR THE POLITICAL POSITION BECAUSE THEY DON NOT HAVE PROPER KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE ABOUT THE SITUATION OF THE COUNTRY AND HOW TO DEAL WITH IT. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, I BELIEVE THAT IF YOUNGER EMPLOYEE HAS ACCESIBLE EXPREIENCED GUIDANCE WITH THEIR NEW WAY OF WORKING THEN SURELY, THE YOUTH CAN BE A GOOD GOVERNMENT WORKER WITH A PLETHORA OF ADVANTAGES FOR THE NATION. IN CONCLUSION, ANY GOVERNMENT POSITION NEEDS A RIGHT CANDIDATE TO QUALIFY WITH PROPER THEORITICAL KNOWLEDGE AND GUIDANCE FORM THE EXPERIENCED LEARDER. HENCE, WHEN ADULT HAS KNOWLEDGE AND ENOUGH TRAINING THAN THEY CAN BE THE BEST AT ANY STAGE.
IT IS
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OFTEN
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CHANGE
THE WORLD WITH THEIR INNOVATIVE
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IDEAS
.
HENCE
, CERTAIN
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PEOPLE
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THINK
THAT
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YOUTH
IS THE PERFECT FOR SUCH AUTHORITY
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POSITIONS
LIKE,
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CALECTOR
.
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WHERE AS
, REST OF THE FOLKS SAYS THAT IT IS NOT PREFERABLE TO PROVIDE A
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REGIE
PLACE TO THE
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YOUTH
.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL
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DISCUS
THE PRIME PROS OF GIVING SUCH PLACE TO AN ADULT CIVILIAN AND
SECONDLY
, CONSEQUENCES OF THE SAME.
LASTLY
, STATE MY OPINION TO SUPPORT THE
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IDEA
OF
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YPUNGER
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PEOPLE
AT HIGHER
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POSITION
IN THE REGIME OFFICE.

ON THE ONE HAND, IF
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YOUTH
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RULE
THE
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GOVERNMENT
OFFICES, THE WORKFORCE COULD BE
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EXPECTED
AS
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THAN
OLDER WORKERS. THIS MAY LEADS TO
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IMPROVE
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ECONOMICAL
STATUS OF THE TERRITORY AS THE YOUNGER EMPLOYEE HAS AN ABILITY TO WORK FASTER THAN AGED
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EMPLOYEEDUE
TO THE HIGH ENERGY AND
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STRENTH
.
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, INDIAN
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DATA
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PEOPLE
WHO ARE UNDER 18 TO 22 YEAR OF AGE,
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BECAUSE
ADULT HAS MORE STRENGTH AND
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STEMINA
TO RUNE AND FIGHT AND HAVE QUICK CRITICAL THINKING
AS WELL
.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, THE MAJOR CONS OF THIS
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IDEA
IS THE MISUNDERSTANDING AND LACK OF
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EXPERIENCEOF
THE YOUNGER EMPLOYEE AT
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GOVERNENT
THAT COULD PUT THEM IN TO THE DETRIMENTAL SITUATION. AT THE
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THEY MIGHT DECLINE THEIR SELF CONFIDENCE, WHICH IS NOT A GREAT.
CONSEQUENTLY
, THEY HAVE THEIR ENTIRE LIFE AHEAD TO
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AND TO
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ACHIVE
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ACHOMPLISHMENT
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FUTHER
.
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HOWEVR
, IF THEY HAVE THE PROPER SUPPORT FROM EXPERIENCED
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PEOPLE
AND HAVE PERFECT
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TRAING
THEN ON ONE CAN
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STOPE
THEM TO ACHIEVE THE SUCCESS AT A
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VERY
YOUNG.
FOR INSTANCE
, INDIAN YOUNG POLITICIAN ARE NOT WORTH FOR THE POLITICAL
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POSITION
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BECAUSE
THEY
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HAVE PROPER KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE ABOUT THE SITUATION OF THE COUNTRY AND HOW TO DEAL WITH IT.

FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, I BELIEVE THAT IF YOUNGER EMPLOYEE HAS
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ACCESIBLE
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EXPREIENCED
GUIDANCE WITH THEIR NEW WAY OF WORKING THEN
SURELY
, THE
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YOUTH
CAN BE A
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GOOD
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GOVERNMENT
WORKER WITH A PLETHORA OF ADVANTAGES FOR THE NATION.

IN CONCLUSION
, ANY
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GOVERNMENT
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POSITION
NEEDS A RIGHT CANDIDATE TO QUALIFY WITH PROPER
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THEORITICAL
KNOWLEDGE AND GUIDANCE FORM THE EXPERIENCED
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LEARDER
.
HENCE
, WHEN ADULT HAS KNOWLEDGE AND
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ENOUGH
TRAINING THAN THEY CAN BE THE BEST AT ANY STAGE.
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IELTS essay Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. v. 6

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
378 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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