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In recent years, increasing numbers of youths make a decision to apply for their favourite jobs rather than the ones with high salaries. I totally agree and support this trend.

In recent years, increasing numbers of youths make a decision to apply for their favourite jobs rather than the ones with high salaries. I totally agree and support this trend. 0EE0Q
In recent years, increasing numbers of youths make a decision to apply for their favourite jobs rather than the ones with high salaries. I totally agree and support this trend. Firstly, one of the most predominant factors having a significant impact on one's career is the love he spends on it. By this I mean if professional skills are the fundamental requirement for one job, passion will be considered as the obligated requirement for permanent employment. Furthermore, spending love for working really has a greater contribution for working performance than commonplace thinking. A number of studies showed that when people do their favorites, they tend to make more effort thân those who do not, which raises remarkably the quality of real projects. On the other hand, there was once a widely social belief that one young man was usually judged by his starting point of salary. That means one who can not make a good income will seem worse than one who has a better financial condition. Also, it is believed that some careers which are interesting to the younger generation are too low-paid. Despite this, such employees as designers or coders, who have to face with negative thoughts, are reported to have a dreaming level of salary. What is more, in addition to the special field of work, the majority of employees will get a satisfactory income after an effective working period. Therefore, financial isuses is not a considerable concern. In conclusion, there is no doubt that following passion is a justifiable decision in comparison with the financial demand. Granted, some adverse concerns are inevitable, but, with the unstoppable attempts, this seems not a frightening challenge for young people.
In recent years, increasing numbers of youths
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make
a decision to apply for their
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favourite
jobs
rather
than the ones with high salaries. I
totally
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agree
and support this trend.

Firstly
, one of the most predominant factors having a significant impact on one's career is the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
he spends on it. By this I mean if professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are the fundamental requirement for one job, passion will
be considered
as the obligated requirement for permanent employment.
Furthermore
, spending
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
for working
really
has a greater contribution for working performance than commonplace thinking. A number of studies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
that when
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
do their favorites, they tend to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
more effort
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thân
those
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who
do not, which raises
remarkably
the quality of real projects.

On the other hand
, there was once a
widely
social belief that one young
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man
was
usually
judged by his starting point of salary. That means one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
can not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a
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good
income will seem worse than one
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who
has a better financial condition.
Also
, it
is believed
that
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some
careers which are interesting to the younger generation are too low-paid. Despite this, such employees as designers or coders,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
face with
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negative
thoughts,
are reported
to have a dreaming level of salary.
What is more
,
in addition
to the special field of work, the majority of employees will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a satisfactory income after an effective working period.
Therefore
, financial
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isuses
is not a considerable concern.

In conclusion
, there is no doubt that following passion is a justifiable decision
in comparison
with the financial demand. Granted,
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some
adverse concerns are inevitable,
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but
, with the unstoppable attempts, this seems not a frightening challenge for young
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people
.
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IELTS essay In recent years, increasing numbers of youths make a decision to apply for their favourite jobs rather than the ones with high salaries. I totally agree and support this trend.

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  American English
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