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In recent times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this occurred ? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home?

In recent times, young adults are spending less time with their families and more time with their friends. Why has this occurred? Do you think parents should force their children to spend more time at home? 1dYW

Lately, it is seen that teenagers love to accompany their mates more than their parents. In my opinion, it is due to the fact that they feel more comfortable and fun with their comrades as compared to their bloodlines. Therefore family member should not restrict and impose any punishment on them as it will create hatred and distance between them. Foremost, children at the age between 13 to 19 feel more enjoyable when they are with their friends as they love to play. Thus, they need a playmates more than their parents. They share similar ideas and excitement over many things such as games, gifts and so on. Whereas with their parents, there is more restriction and scolding. For example, research shows that adventurous tour made by the teen with their friends are doubled in numbers in year 2019 as compared to 2018 statistics. On the other hand, parents should not stop their children when they hang out with their mates. Also, they should avoid punishing for doing such things as it will rise to the disagreement between them. Thus, it will ruin their relationship. Instead they should create joyful environment at home, so that their children will stop going out. For instance, there are lots of cases of children running away form their resident as their parents are dominant and exploited their freedom. In conclusion, parents should value and understand the needs of their offsprings while raising them and they can keep their child near them by creating warm and welcoming environment at home that they feel when they are with their schoolmates. Thus, without any complication, parents-child bond can be maintained and secured.

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teenagers
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love
 to accompany their mates more than their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
. In my opinion, it is due to the fact that they feel more comfortable and fun with their comrades as compared to their bloodlines. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Therefore,
Therefore
 family member should not restrict and impose any punishment on them as it will create hatred and distance between them.

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children
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between 13 to 19
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feel
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love
 to play. Thus
, they need Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a playmate" or simply "playmates"?a playmateplaymates
a playmates
 more than their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
. They share similar This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
ideas
 and excitement over This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 things such as games, gifts and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 on. Whereas with their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
, there is more restriction and scolding. For example
, research This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 that adventurous tour made by the teen with their friends are doubled
 in numbers in year 2019 as compared to 2018 statistics.

On the other hand
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 should not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 when they hang out with their mates. Also
, they should avoid punishing for doing such things as it will rise to the disagreement between them. Thus
, it will ruin their relationship. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Instead,
Instead
 they should create joyful environment at home, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 going out. For instance
, there are lots of cases of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinfanttoddleradolescentjuvenileyouthteenager
children
 running away form their resident as their You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 are dominant and exploited their freedom.

In conclusion
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfathermother
parents
 should value and understand the needs of their Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "offspring", the plural form of the noun 'offspring'?offspringoff springs
offsprings
 while raising Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).them, and
them and
 they can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 their child near them by creating warm and welcoming environment at home that they feel when they are with their schoolmates. Thus
, without any complication, parents-child bond can be maintained
 and secured. 