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In recent times, the Internet has gradually substituted books for the purpose of knowledge storage

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In recent times, the Internet has gradually substituted books for the purpose of knowledge storage. Storing knowledge on the Internet would introduce both pros and cons, but I think that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. On the one hand, it is clear that online information would bring about several disadvantages. One evident weakness is that it would bring readers fake or wrong information. There are many unreliable sources that deliver inaccurate knowledge, making it hard for an average user to differentiate between true or false information. Another reason is that it would cost a high price to buy digital devices to access the Internet whereas books are the cheaper option to get the same knowledge. Last but not least, learning something on bright screens may affect the eyes of readers. According to a survey, more people get affected by eye-sight problems after sitting in front of the desktops. On the other hand, I argue that the advantages of this development would prove to be more important. First, we quickly find the knowledge on the Internet more than in books. It means that it only needs a few clicks on search tools to precisely locate the citation we are looking for, which is cheaper, much more convenient, and time-saving compared to looking for the same amount of knowledge from printed books. Wikipedia as an example provides the expertise of all fields free to the public. Second, unlike books, the Internet provides readers with different forms of knowledge like sounds, colorful pictures, or animations. Consequently, this option is more lively than reading books with just words and words. Finally, online information can be shared with anyone faster through the link, the others just need to click the link and they can see the post. It is safe and convenient. In conclusion, even though storing knowledge on the Internet has both merits and demerits, in my individual view, the purpose of the storage using the Internet is better than the old way.
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gradually
substituted
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books
for the purpose of
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knowledge
storage. Storing
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knowledge
on the Internet would introduce both pros and cons,
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but
I
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think
that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks.

On the one hand, it is
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clear
that online
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information
would bring about several disadvantages. One evident weakness is that it would bring readers fake or
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wrong
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information
. There are
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many
unreliable sources that deliver inaccurate
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knowledge
, making it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for an average user to differentiate between true or false
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information
. Another reason is that it would cost a high price to
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buy
digital devices to access the Internet whereas
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books
are the cheaper option to
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get
the same
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knowledge
. Last
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but
not least, learning something on bright screens may affect the eyes of readers. According to a survey, more
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people
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get
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affected
by eye-sight problems after sitting in front of the desktops.

On the other hand
, I argue that the advantages of this development would prove to be more
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important
.
First
, we
quickly
find the
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knowledge
on the Internet more than in
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books
. It means that it
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only
needs a few clicks on search tools to
precisely
locate the citation we are looking for, which is cheaper, much more convenient, and time-saving compared to looking for the same amount of
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knowledge
from printed
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books
. Wikipedia as an example provides the expertise of all fields free to the public. Second, unlike
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books
, the Internet provides readers with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
forms of
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knowledge
like sounds, colorful pictures, or animations.
Consequently
, this option is more lively than reading
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books
with
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just
words and words.
Finally
, online
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information
can
be shared
with anyone faster through the link, the others
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just
need to click the
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link and
they can
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see
the post. It is safe and convenient.

In conclusion
,
even though
storing
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knowledge
on the Internet has both merits and demerits, in my individual view, the purpose of the storage using the Internet is better than the
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old
way.
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IELTS essay In recent times, the Internet has gradually substituted books for the purpose of knowledge storage

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329 words
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