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In recent time economic growth has made some people richer in both developed and developing countries. While studies show that people in developing countries are happier now than before, people in developed countries are no happier than they were before. v.2

In recent time economic growth has made some people richer in both developed and developing countries. While studies show that people in developing countries are happier now than before, people in developed countries are no happier than they were before. v. 2
The world economy has improved significantly in the past few years and made several people become wealthier in both advanced and developing countries. Based on the research, it is found that people who live in developing countries are enjoying their lives more than before nowadays, while those who live advanced countries are no happier that before. The following essay will discuss in details about some of the reasons and what can we learn from it. On the one hand, it is a fact the world economic has grown rapidly in the past recent years. Many developing and developed countries have experienced some positive improvements in the economic sectors, as their GDP have increased and inflation rate got lower. Some of the people have taken the advantage and as a consequence, they became richer. The economic growth has created a lot of new billionaires these days, such as the CEO of Air Asia Tony Fernandez and the Mital Family from India. Based on some scientific studies, it is found that people who live in developing countries are happier than ever nowadays, as their economic condition has grown rapidly in the past few years. As some of the people’s lives and economic status have changed dramatically from poor to middle-income class, they felt grateful and pleased with the improvement and enjoyed their lives. In contrast to the condition above, developed countries’ people are no happier than they were before. Should there be any improvement in their economic status, it would not give any significant changes into their way of lives, as they already have a high standard of living. Many of them already have their own properties and vehicles, and their government already provided them with good public health, education and transportation system. Therefore it is harder for them to feel grateful in terms of their economic condition. In conclusion, it is true that the world economic have grown rapidly in the past few decades, and it has made some of the people in developing and developed countries become wealthier. Is it reported that as the economic sector in developing countries are growing, the people are feeling are happier than ever before, as many of them have experienced drastic changes in their ways of living. Many of them have successfully escaped from poverty problems and change their economic status. On the other hand, many people who live in advanced countries are no happier than before, as they already live in a better and comfort situation.
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people
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developing
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countries
. Based on the research, it
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people
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who
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live
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developing
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countries
are enjoying their
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lives
more than
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before
nowadays, while those
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live
advanced
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countries
are no
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. The following essay will discuss in
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details
about
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some of the
reasons and what can we learn from it.

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economic
has grown
rapidly
in the
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past
recent years.
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developing
and developed
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countries
have experienced
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some
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positive
improvements in the
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economic
sectors, as their GDP have increased and inflation rate
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got
lower.
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people
have taken the advantage and as a consequence, they became richer. The
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economic
growth has created
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a lot of
new billionaires these days, such as the CEO of Air Asia Tony Fernandez and the
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Mital
Family from India.

Based on
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some
scientific studies, it
is found
that
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people
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who
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live
in
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developing
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countries
are
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happier
than ever nowadays, as their
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economic
condition has grown
rapidly
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few years. As
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people’s
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economic
status have
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changed
dramatically
from poor to middle-income
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class
, they felt grateful and
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pleased
with the improvement and enjoyed their
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lives
.
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countries’
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happier
than they were
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before
. Should there be any improvement in their
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economic
status, it would not give any significant
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changes
into their way of
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have a high standard of living.
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of them
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have their
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government
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already
provided them with
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good
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economic
condition.

In conclusion
, it is true that the world
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have grown
rapidly
in the
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past
few decades, and it has made
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some of the
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people
in
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developing
and developed
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countries
become wealthier. Is it reported that as the
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economic
sector in
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developing
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countries
are growing, the
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people
are feeling are
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happier
than ever
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before
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of them have experienced drastic
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changes
in their ways of living.
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of them have
successfully
escaped from poverty problems and
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their
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economic
status.
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,
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in a better and comfort situation.
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IELTS essay In recent time economic growth has made some people richer in both developed and developing countries. While studies show that people in developing countries are happier now than before, people in developed countries are no happier than they were before. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
413 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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