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In our days, young people often feel bored. Give reasons why ?

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In our days, there's a king who controls our life called " Technology". It converted everything around us to digital things that we can only see on the screen. The young people now have digital friends, digital games, . . . so when they want to meet their friends or to play with them or to communicate with them it will be online (it's easy and practical). But for them, when the call ended and the game finished, there's nothing to do, so they feel bored. And that is completely different from the past, when the people had a real life amd they're always together, their brain is not programmed; they were inventing mant games and playing everywhere without getting bored. Life was easier.
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for them, when the call ended and the game finished, there's nothing to do,
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IELTS essay In our days, young people often feel bored. Give reasons why?

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