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In order to find a good job, people should have a university degree. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

In order to find a good job, people should have a university degree. v. 1
Tax rates have been a debatable topic for centuries. Some people think that a high tax rate should be applied by the governments in order to improve the overall local amenities. I agree that a high tariff can be used to improve public services, however, there should be a limit on the tax rate. Having a good public service is depending on the taxation revenue of a country. This means that if the people of a country pay a high amount of tax yearly, we can assure that the general services of that nation such as transportation, healthcare, and education, provided will be excellent as the government has the fund to maintain such services. In German, for instance, people are able to access all the health centres without any charges as it is funded by the revenue from taxation. That is why governments should have implemented a high tax rate for everyone. There should be a limit, however, on how much an individual or company should be taxed. Although someone with a higher income should be taxed higher, the government must be fair in creating a certain limit of tax rate so that the taxpayers will not be de-motivated and can still continue to work. This example can be seen in Singapore, where the motivation index of the taxpayers in paying the tax is increased as they are given some incentives by the government. Therefore, it is essential to create such a limitation for all individuals who pay the tax. In conclusion, this essay discussed why it is good for governments to apply a high tax rate as it improves the quality of the local amenities, however, there should be a limitation on the rate to be taxed. In my opinion, the government should tax the people based on their income so that the taxpayers will continue to pay and the public services will also be maintained well.
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rates
have been a debatable topic for centuries.
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people
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think
that a
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high
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tax
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rate
should
be applied
by the
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governments
in order to
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improve
the
overall
local amenities. I
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agree
that a
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high
tariff can be
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used
to
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improve
public
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services
,
however
, there should be a limit on the
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tax
rate.

Having a
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good
public
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service
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is depending
on the taxation revenue of a country. This means that if the
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people
of a country pay a
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high
amount of
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tax
yearly, we can assure that the general
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services
of that nation such as transportation, healthcare, and education, provided will be excellent as the
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government
has the fund to maintain such
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services
. In German,
for instance
,
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people
are able to access all the health
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centres
without any charges as it
is funded
by the revenue from taxation.
That is
why
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governments
should have implemented a
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high
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tax
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rate
for everyone.

There should be a limit,
however
, on how much an individual or
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company
should
be taxed
. Although someone with a higher income should
be taxed
higher, the
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government
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must
be
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fair
in creating a certain limit of
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tax
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rate
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so
that the taxpayers will not be
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de-motivated
and can
still
continue to work. This example can be
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seen
in Singapore, where the motivation index of the taxpayers in paying the
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tax
is increased
as they are
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given
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some
incentives by the
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government
.
Therefore
, it is essential to create such a limitation for all individuals who pay the tax.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed why it is
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good
for
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governments
to apply a
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high
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tax
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rate
as it
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improves
the quality of the local amenities,
however
, there should be a limitation on the
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rate
to
be taxed
. In my opinion, the
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government
should
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tax
the
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people
based on their income
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so
that the taxpayers will continue to pay and the public
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services
will
also
be maintained
well.
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IELTS essay In order to find a good job, people should have a university degree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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