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In my view, today lifestyles are unhealthier rather than 100 years ago for two specific reasons.

In my view, today lifestyles are unhealthier rather than 100 years ago for two specific reasons. First, lots of works are sedentary. For instance, people in the past worked in farms or factories, and they had manual work, but now people work while they are sitting on a chair. Second, our food is unhealthier. For example, In the former century, all foods were organic, but now we have lots of genetically modified and processed food. They are poisonous to our bodies. And that's why I believe people in the past had a healthier lifestyle rather than us.
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in the past worked in farms or factories, and they had manual work,
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work while they are sitting on a chair. Second, our food is unhealthier.
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, In the former century, all foods were organic,
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now
we have lots of
genetically
modified and processed food. They are poisonous to our bodies. And that's why I believe
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people
in the past had a healthier lifestyle
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IELTS essay In my view, today lifestyles are unhealthier rather than 100 years ago for two specific reasons.

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  American English
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97 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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