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In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future? bn9Y
Families are the building blocks of the society. Parents play an incredible, crucial and indispensable role Families are the building blocks of the society. Parents play an incredible, crucial and indispensable role for the development of children. Fathers and mothers both have an individuality, and are equally responsible for the growth of the child physically, mentally and emotionally. But still most of the societies have a different thinking that their role differs. So here I would like to discuss the reasons of these differences. In most of the societies, especially the remote areas and villages, people believe that role of mother is just to give birth to a child and look after child’s schooling, eating and home work and father is the one who brings the money for bread and butter and doesn’t have to do anything with the child’s care. Due to this, women are deprived of working out and even are deprived of education. First and foremost reason for these differences is that people are illiterate and 60% of the people are still below the poverty line. They are not aware of the good and bad things. Secondly, they follow the old fuddy-duddy customs and traditions. Thirdly, I believe that in these old fashioned societies people don’t have family planning, birth rate is high so women are forced to sit at home and feed the children. Therefore, all the burden of child’s development comes on her shoulders and men have nothing to do except working and earning money. Just imagine if a father is asked in which class his child studies he has to think so hard and even then he cannot recollect. If women go out and work, then older people get skeptical and scold them, as they are narrow minded. However, in the future the scenario will change. We are living in an era of globalization and westernization in 21st century. We are influenced by western culture. Nowadays people are educated, literate and aware of things and are broadminded. Parents understand their responsibility and work equally for the holistic development of the child. So, in the future conditions will improve a lot. Parents will plan the things for the bright and shiny future of their children. And they will be united and the child will not be deprived of the fathers love. Both will work so that they can do savings in the future for their child and presently in urban areas things are like this only. To conclude, there are many reasons for the gender differences in parental roles, but the future is predicted to hold no such differences
Families are the building blocks of the
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society
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Parents
play an incredible, crucial and indispensable
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role
Families are the building blocks of the
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society
.
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Parents
play an incredible, crucial and indispensable
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role
for the development of children.
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Fathers
and mothers both have an individuality, and are
equally
responsible for the growth of the
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child
physically
, mentally and
emotionally
.
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still
most of the
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societies
have a
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different
thinking that their
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role
differs.
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So
here I would like to discuss the reasons of these differences.

In most of the
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societies
,
especially
the remote areas and villages,
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people
believe that
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role
of mother is
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just
to give birth to a
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child
and look after
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child’s
schooling, eating and home
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work
and
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father
is the one who brings the money for bread and butter and doesn’t
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have to
do anything with the
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child’s
care. Due to this, women
are deprived
of working out and even
are deprived
of education.
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and foremost reason for these differences is that
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people
are illiterate and 60% of the
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people
are
still
below the poverty line. They are not aware of the
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good
and
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bad
things.
Secondly
, they follow the
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old
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fuddy-duddy
customs and traditions.

Thirdly
, I believe that in these
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old fashioned
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societies
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people
don’t have family planning, birth rate is high
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so
women
are forced
to sit at home and feed the children.
Therefore
, all the burden of
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child’s
development
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comes
on her shoulders and
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men
have nothing to do except working and earning money.
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imagine if a
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father
is asked
in which
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class
his
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child
studies he
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has to
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think
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hard
and even then he cannot recollect. If women go out and
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work
, then older
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people
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get
skeptical and scold them, as they are
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narrow minded
.

However
, in the
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future
the scenario will
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change
. We are living in an era of globalization and
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westernization
in 21st century. We
are influenced
by western culture. Nowadays
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people
are educated
, literate and aware of things and
are broadminded
.
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Parents
understand their responsibility and
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work
equally
for the holistic development of the
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child
.
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So
, in the
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future
conditions will
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improve
a lot.
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Parents
will plan the things for the bright and shiny
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future
of their children. And they will
be united
and the
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child
will not
be deprived
of the
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fathers
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love
. Both will
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work
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so
that they can do savings in the
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future
for their
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child
and
presently
in urban areas things are like this
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only
.

To conclude
, there are
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many
reasons for the gender differences in parental
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roles
,
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but
the
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future
is predicted
to hold no such differences
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IELTS essay In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes In most of the societies, the role of mother and father differs. What are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in future?

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