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in most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why is this the case, and what can be done to solve the problem? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

in most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why is this the case, and what can be done to solve the problem? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence. OwpaN
Generally speaking, younger people are more likely to be unemployed. There are several reasons for it and the solutions to it are not easy to implement in the short term. However, the proper incentives need to be in place for the companies and the young people to move forward. First of all, it is often heard that there are millions of jobs that remained vacant even without people applying for them. It appears that there is a mismatch in the job market, the qualifications and the expectations on both sides. This is especially true in labor-intensive work. More and more youth are pushed through advanced degrees. Advanced degrees are very good from a personal interest view however the students that pursue them are not aware of the potential job market afterward. There is no planning between the higher education institutes and the potential employers. It is difficult to plan future needs as the requirement for the job market would mean the education to be ready 5 to 10 years ahead for example until the early 2000s secretarial trainings were still taught in France but the emphasis on robotic was minimal. Nevertheless, only if there is a discussion between education representatives and trade unions or the like occurs can the one pass on its assumed needs and then for the education sector to adapt. Secondly, the employers are often concerned that the lack of experience and the cost of hiring. After having searched for the right candidate for some time and trained him, there is a high chance that either his work expectation or his capability is leading to a dismissal or a resignation but the employer has spent time and money already, this means that in the future they would rather hire people with previous experience. In order to fluidify the market for youth, the employers should be incentivized to hire younger people using tax-credit or subsidies to make them interesting to hire from a financial stand-point. To conclude, employers can be interested by young people but with the right set of skills and must be willing to take on some risks. However the public institutions needs to work hand-in-hand with the business leaders to promote the employment of the youth, this comes in two acts, one being desirable for the job market while offering realistic opportunities and then derisking the hiring through incentives.
Generally
speaking, younger
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people
are more likely to
be unemployed
. There are several reasons for it and the solutions to it are not easy to implement in the short term.
However
, the proper incentives
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need
to be in place for the
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companies
and the young
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
forward.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, it is
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often
heard that there are millions of
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jobs
that remained vacant even without
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people
applying for them. It appears that there is a mismatch in the
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job
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market
, the qualifications and the expectations on both sides. This is
especially
true in labor-intensive work. More and more youth
are pushed
through advanced degrees. Advanced degrees are
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very
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good
from a personal interest view
however
the students that pursue them are not aware of the potential
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job
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market
afterward. There is no planning between the higher
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education
institutes and the potential
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employers
. It is difficult to plan future
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needs
as the requirement for the
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job
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market
would mean the
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education
to be ready 5 to 10 years ahead
for example
until the early 2000s secretarial trainings were
still
taught in France
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but
the emphasis on robotic was minimal.
Nevertheless
,
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only
if there is a discussion between
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education
representatives and trade unions or the like occurs can the one pass on its assumed
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needs
and then for the
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education
sector to adapt.

Secondly
, the
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employers
are
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often
concerned that the lack of experience and the cost of hiring. After having searched for the right candidate for
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some
time and trained him, there is a high chance that either his work expectation or his capability is leading to a dismissal or a resignation
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but
the
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employer
has spent time and money already, this means that in the future they would
rather
hire
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people
with previous experience. In order to
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fluidify
the
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market
for youth, the
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employers
should
be incentivized
to hire younger
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
using tax-credit or subsidies to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them interesting to hire from a financial stand-point.

To conclude
,
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employers
can be
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interested by
young
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people
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but
with the right set of
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skills
and
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must
be willing to take on
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some
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risks
.
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However
the public institutions
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needs
to work hand-in-hand with the business leaders to promote the employment of the youth, this
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comes
in two acts, one being desirable for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
market
while offering realistic opportunities and then
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derisking
the hiring through incentives.
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IELTS essay in most countries, young people form a large proportion of those who are unemployed. Why is this the case, and what can be done to solve the problem? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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