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Finace and Higher education

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Higher education is very common for graduates. In my view, there are many factors that affect the decision to pursue further study and I don’t agree with the statement that finance is the first and foremost consideration to apply for it. To begin with, those who pursue higher education often think carefully and have career orientation. They assume that knowledge and qualifications will be useful for future jobs and are willing to pay a large amount to study. In the present, financial issues may be a barrier, but in the long term, it's a worthy investment. Secondly, these days, there are many policies to help people learn to approach advanced knowledge. Each year, a variety of domestic and foreign scholarship programs are organized with different levels of support. You can also get a state loan or borrow money from relatives if you can't afford to study at the moment. Finally, we can choose to study part-time which allows you to work and pursue other activities while you complete further education. It can help you balance work, academic and family life. There are many flexible forms of learning for part-time students, such as: Online learning, guided self-learning, . . . Instead of thinking about finances, the most important thing we need to do right now is to invest our time in learning so that it is worth the time, effort and money spent. In the end, the choice of further study is an important decision of the graduate. We need to clearly define the goal and have a strict learning regime to achieve it. If you're having trouble with financial problems, share with your family to solve it. Don't let it be a barrier on your road to success
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common for graduates. In my view, there are
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many
factors that affect the decision to pursue
further
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study
and I don’t
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agree
with the statement that finance is the
first
and foremost consideration to apply for it.

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begin
with, those who pursue higher education
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often
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think
carefully
and have career orientation. They assume that knowledge and qualifications will be useful for future jobs and are willing to pay a large amount to
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study
. In the present, financial issues may be a barrier,
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but
in the long term, it's a worthy investment.

Secondly
, these days, there are
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many
policies to
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help
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people
learn to approach advanced knowledge. Each year, a variety of domestic and foreign scholarship programs
are organized
with
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different
levels of support. You can
also
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get
a state loan or borrow money from relatives if you can't afford to
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study
at the moment.

Finally
, we can choose to
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study
part-time which
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allows
you to work and pursue other activities while you complete
further
education. It can
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help
you balance work, academic and family life. There are
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many
flexible forms of
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learning
for part-time students, such as: Online
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learning
, guided self-learning
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Instead
of thinking about finances, the most
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important
thing we need to do right
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now
is to invest our time in
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learning
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so
that it is worth the time, effort and money spent.

In the
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end
, the choice of
further
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study
is an
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important
decision of the graduate. We need to
clearly
define the goal and have a strict
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learning
regime to achieve it. If you're having trouble with financial problems, share with your family to solve it. Don't
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let
it be a barrier on your road to
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success
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IELTS essay Finace and Higher education

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
287 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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