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In modern young people not depending on their parents.Explain the reason

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Parents are first teachers in everyone's life. They learn how to walk, how to talk before we reach the " real world " . From the childhood, they guide us in doing things, supports us in every situations. But nowadays, teenagers are ignoring their parents from their life. I have many reasons to hold this opinion. Firstly, young people are hanging in new technological developments. In olden days, these inventions are not there, so young people used to go to their parents to ask their doubts and they used to clear it if they know about it. Otherwise they find out from other friends. But now, they want to learn everything from internet. If they don't understand any thing, they are searching in webs about particular topic. In net there is clear information than the information from their parents. So internet and computers made some gap between the parents and children. Next nowadays, new trends and policies are coming. Parents are not that aware about trends and fashions. So, obviously they are opposing their children to addict to new trends. There are so many changes in education systems like in colleges and universities. Parents don't know about new systems as they are also facing these changes first time. So they are not able to guide their children about education as they are not very much aware about these. Some parents force their children to join in courses that they are not interest. They want their aims to fulfill by their children moreover they are forcing or creating pressure in teenagers mind. Some students are showing interest in new subjects such as robotics but parents are not encouraging the interests because they have a fear that new courses may create a history or mystery in their children's life. We can predict the scope of new subjects. These controversies creating a small line between parents and children. For example, my cousin interested to do engineering but his parents joined him in doctor course. Even though he is not interested, he joined and failed all the exams. Because of that he was not interested to involve with his parents. To conclude, because of above reasons, young people are not very much depending on their parents. The reason may either children or parent, they have to understand each other and respect each others ideas, then only we can lessen the gap between them.
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we reach the
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situations
.
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But
nowadays,
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teenagers
are ignoring their
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parents
from their life. I have
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many
reasons to hold this opinion.

Firstly
, young
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people
are hanging in
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new
technological developments. In olden days, these inventions are not there,
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so
young
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people
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used
to go to their
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parents
to ask their
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doubts and
they
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used
to
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clear
it if they know about it.
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Otherwise
they find out from other friends.
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But
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now
, they want to learn everything from internet. If they don't understand
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any thing
, they are searching in webs about particular topic. In net there is
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clear
information than the information from their
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parents
.
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So
internet and computers made
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some
gap between the
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parents
and children.

Next
nowadays,
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new
trends and policies are coming.
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Parents
are not that aware about trends and fashions.
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So
,
obviously
they are opposing their
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children
to addict to
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new
trends. There are
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so
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many
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changes
in education systems like in colleges and universities.
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Parents
don't know about
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new
systems as they are
also
facing these
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changes
first
time.
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So
they are not able to guide their
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children
about education as they are not
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very
much aware about these.

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Some
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parents
force their
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children
to
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join
in courses that they are not interest. They want their aims to fulfill by their
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children
moreover
they are forcing or creating pressure in
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teenagers
mind.
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Some
students are showing interest in
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new
subjects such as robotics
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but
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parents
are not encouraging the interests
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because
they have a fear that
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new
courses may create a history or mystery in their children's life. We can predict the scope of
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new
subjects. These controversies creating a
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small
line between
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parents
and
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children
.
For example
, my cousin interested to do engineering
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but
his
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parents
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joined
him in doctor course.
Even though
he is not interested, he
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joined
and failed all the exams.
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Because
of that he was not interested to involve with his parents.

To conclude
,
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because
of above reasons, young
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people
are not
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very
much depending on their
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parents
. The reason may either
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children
or
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parent
, they
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have to
understand each other and respect each others
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ideas
, then
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only
we can lessen the gap between them.
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IELTS essay In modern young people not depending on their parents. Explain the reason

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  American English
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