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In modern days, educated children have become a heated topic in over the world.

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In modern days, educated children have become a heated topic in over the world. It is believed that educate children about having good behavior in society is the responsibility of the police while others argue that parents are the persons who have to take responsibility on how their children behave. From my perspective, although it’s understandable and has apparent merits, there are demerits as well, and my essay will outline both. To begin with, many people believe that educate children about good behavior in society is the police’ responsibility. One of the major reasons related to this is police is the person who maintains the social standard and represents the justice. For instance, in Malaysia, police have taken responsibility to teach children how to behave in social because children will follow direct what is police say and they believe police always is true. On another hand, there are several reasons why parents are the person have to take responsibility on their children’s behave. The principal one is that family members are the closest and easiest to children who can affect their behavior. According to a recent and reputable report about how parents affect children in Japan. As result, they figure out that more than eighty percent of children in Japan follow what their parents say. They always polite and being formal anywhere they go for the reason that they believe on the true thing their parents say. In conclusion, though there are certain levels of child education. To help them have better in the perspective is responsible for all social. However, the parent is the most significant in the development of the child.
In modern days, educated
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children
have become a heated topic in over the world. It
is believed
that educate
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children
about having
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good
behavior in society is the
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responsibility
of the
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police
while others argue that
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parents
are the persons who
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have to
take
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responsibility
on how their
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children
behave. From my perspective, although it’s understandable and has apparent merits, there are demerits
as well
, and my essay will outline both.

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people
believe that educate
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children
about
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good
behavior in society is the
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police’
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responsibility
. One of the major reasons related to this is
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police
is the person who maintains the social standard and represents the justice.
For instance
, in Malaysia,
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police
have taken
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responsibility
to teach
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children
how to behave in social
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because
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children
will follow direct what is
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police
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say and
they believe
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always is true.

On another hand, there are several reasons why
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parents
are the person
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have to
take
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responsibility
on their
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children’s
behave. The principal one is that family members are the closest and easiest to
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children
who can affect their behavior. According to a recent and reputable report about how
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parents
affect
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children
in Japan. As result, they figure out that more than eighty percent of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
in Japan follow what their
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parents
say. They always polite and being formal anywhere they go for the reason that they believe on the true thing their
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parents
say.

In conclusion
, though there are certain levels of child education. To
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help
them have better in the perspective is responsible for all social.
However
, the
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parent
is the most significant in the development of the child.
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IELTS essay In modern days, educated children have become a heated topic in over the world.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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