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In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading an unsustainable increase in the cost of public health care

In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading an unsustainable increase in the cost of public health care nRKRR
If we want quality healthcare then, clearly this financial burden needs to be alleviated. One way to do so would be to increase the contributions made by citizens through increased taxation. Alternatively, governments could encourage those who can afford it to take up private healthcare arrangements. By switching to a private model, the well-off can afford a higher quality of care, while at the same relieving pressure on public services for those who do not have the means to go private. One thing is for certain, an ageing population has increased the pressure on existing health provision. If we are going to maintain the standards of healthcare that we are used to, more funding needs to be found either through taxation and alternative forms of provision should be considered. Otherwise, standards will fall and people’s lives will be put at risk.
If we want quality healthcare then,
clearly
this financial burden needs to
be alleviated
.

One way to do
so
would be to increase the contributions made by citizens through increased taxation.
Alternatively
,
governments
could encourage those who can afford it to take up private healthcare arrangements. By switching to a private model, the well-off can afford a higher quality of care, while at the same relieving pressure on public services for those who do not have the means to go private.

One thing is for certain, an
ageing
population has increased the pressure on existing health provision. If we are going to maintain the standards of healthcare that we are
used
to, more funding needs to
be found
either through taxation and alternative forms of provision should
be considered
.
Otherwise
, standards will fall and
people
’s
lives
will
be put
at
risk
.
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IELTS essay In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading an unsustainable increase in the cost of public health care

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  American English
3 paragraphs
141 words
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