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In many places,prisons are overcrowded and expensive for government to maintain.Yet when offenders are released,they end up back in prison a short while later.Does prison work?Should lawbreakers be rehabilitated or punished?

In many places, prisons are overcrowded and expensive for government to maintain. Yet when offenders are released, they end up back in prison a short while later. Does prison work? Should lawbreakers be rehabilitated or punished? n66ke
As the world is progressing, crime rates are also growing. In every country there are multiple jails and the maintainance of prisons is considered expensive and are overcrowded as well as criminals continue to commit crimes after being released and put in jails again which give rise to queries like does the prisons change anything and the culprits should be disciplined or rehabilitated. This essay will delve into both the aspects of this vexed statement. First of all, noticing the amount of criminal activities there is a certain need of prison in every country. These detention centres are used to keep the criminals until their charges are lifted. In addition these custody centres sometimes fails to correct the wrongdoers by offering facilities and fullfilling their basic needs. Some convicts take advantage of this and do not think of their detention as a correction. On the other hand, there are many types of culprits who commit various crimes. These offences range from theaft to violent activisties such as kidnapping, murder and rape. Therefore, punishment for the latter criminals is necessary and should never be let rehabilitate. However, minor deliquents should be fined for their activities and warned before returning to their normal life. Hence, considering the importance of prison even though it fails to fullfill the responsibilities the punishment or rehabilitation of lawbreakers depends upon the types of violations they are involved in performing.
As the world is progressing, crime rates are
also
growing. In every country there are multiple jails and the
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maintainance
of
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prisons
is considered
expensive and
are overcrowded
as well
as
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criminals
continue to commit crimes after
being released
and put in jails again which give rise to queries like does the
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prisons
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change
anything and the culprits should
be disciplined
or rehabilitated. This essay will delve into both the aspects of this vexed statement.

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First of all
, noticing the amount of
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criminal
activities there is a certain need of
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prison
in every country. These detention
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centres
are
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used
to
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keep
the
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criminals
until their charges
are lifted
. In
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addition
these custody
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centres
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sometimes
fails to correct the wrongdoers by offering facilities and
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fullfilling
their basic needs.
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Some
convicts take advantage of this and do not
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think
of their detention as a correction.

On the other hand
, there are
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many
types of culprits who commit various crimes. These
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offences
range from
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theaft
to violent
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activisties
such as kidnapping, murder and rape.
Therefore
, punishment for the latter
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criminals
is necessary and should never be
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let
rehabilitate.
However
, minor
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deliquents
should
be fined
for their activities and warned
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before
returning to their normal life.

Hence
, considering the importance of
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prison
even though
it fails to
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fullfill
the responsibilities the punishment or rehabilitation of lawbreakers depends upon the types of violations they
are involved
in performing.
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IELTS essay In many places, prisons are overcrowded and expensive for government to maintain. Yet when offenders are released, they end up back in prison a short while later. Does prison work? Should lawbreakers be rehabilitated or punished?

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