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In many countries, young people are moving from rural areas to cities to work or study. Why is this happening? What are advantages or disadvantages of this trend?

In many countries, young people are moving from rural areas to cities to work or study. Why is this happening? What are advantages or disadvantages of this trend? m172d
Nowadays there is a trend of youngsters leaving their homes in the ountryside and opting to go to cities for employment and education. There are various factors pertaining to this scenario and the essay shall examine both the benefits and drawbacks of this behaviour and also the causes for the same. There are two main reasons for people migrating from villages to cities: more employment opportunities and quality schooling. A better profession means regular income and more secured life financially. In addition, superior quality learning is offered in urban areas along with an improved standard of living due to urbanization. As per the available data almost 100% of the youngsters who have just secondary educational qualification move to cities taking into account the next generations learning opportunities also. To avail these two provisions many young people are compelled to settle in urban areas. In the past few years, many aspects contributing to rural-urban migration has been neglected. Why do people turn their face against this fact? It is yet to be answered. Cities are overpopulated causing the increase in pollution which results in exploitation of natural resources and yet, considering it as the part of evolution and development and labelled as luxurious people among society. On the other hand, people in rural areas conserve the natural resources and agriculture and yet, considered as illiterate, pressuring them to live as underprivileged. Moreover, no measures are implemented by the government for the improvement of education and employment facilities for the welfare of the urban community. In conclusion, if the government accentuates the lifestyle of countrymen by developing the amenities or policies which are currently prevailing in rural areas, not only it will be beneficial to the people but also will revamp the whole nation's economic and industrial growth.
Nowadays there is a trend of youngsters leaving their homes in the
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ountryside
and opting to go to
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cities
for employment and education. There are various factors pertaining to this scenario and the essay shall examine both the benefits and drawbacks of this
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behaviour
and
also
the causes for the same.

There are two main reasons for
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people
migrating from villages to
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cities
: more employment opportunities and quality schooling. A better profession means regular income and more secured life
financially
.
In addition
, superior quality learning
is offered
in urban areas along with an
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improved
standard of living due to urbanization.
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As
per the available data almost 100% of the youngsters who have
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just
secondary educational qualification
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move
to
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cities
taking into account the
next
generations learning opportunities
also
. To avail these two provisions
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many
young
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people
are compelled
to settle in urban areas.

In the past few years,
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many
aspects contributing to rural-urban migration has
been neglected
. Why do
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people
turn their face against this fact? It is
yet
to
be answered
.
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Cities
are overpopulated
causing the increase in pollution which results in exploitation of natural resources and
yet
, considering it as the part of evolution and development and labelled as luxurious
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people
among society.
On the other hand
,
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people
in rural areas conserve the natural resources and agriculture and
yet
, considered as illiterate, pressuring them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
as underprivileged.
Moreover
, no measures
are implemented
by the
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government
for the improvement of education and employment facilities for the welfare of the urban community.

In conclusion
, if the
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government
accentuates the lifestyle of countrymen by developing the amenities or policies which are
currently
prevailing in rural areas, not
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only
it will be beneficial to the
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people
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but
also
will revamp the whole nation's economic and industrial growth.
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IELTS essay In many countries, young people are moving from rural areas to cities to work or study. Why is this happening? What are advantages or disadvantages of this trend?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
296 words
7.5
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