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In Many Countries Today, People In Cities Either Live Alone Or In Small Family Units

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The family structure has undergone drastic changes due to urbanization. In many cities now, most families consist of just one or two persons. In my opinion, the shrinking of the family unit is an unwelcome trend. Families are becoming smaller due to a number of reasons and it is a negative trend. The main reason is that when people live in nuclear families they fail to bond with their relatives. And those who live alone suffer from loneliness and depression. For example, many urban residents who live alone suffer from higher levels of stress because they have no one to care for them when they fall ill and experience other problems. For instance, a recent BBC documentary revealed that lack of family attachment is the prime reason apart from work stress that is leading to an increased number of family breakups, suicides, and domestic violence in London households. Children also suffer from the shrinking of family size. Children with busy parents are left alone at care centres and schools without much affection and guidance to nurture them at their tender age. The support provided by day care centres is no match to the love and care a child can receive from extended family members like grandparents. Despite the above detrimental effects there may be a positive aspect to having a small family in a city. The only positive side in having a small family is financial affordability in a city environment. It is true that cost cutting is important for urban dwellers; however, living in a joint family is a great way to beat loneliness, and alienation. In conclusion, it is evident that small families are the norm in cities although a large extended family with joy and bonding is important for a thriving family. In my opinion, if given a chance, people should never hesitate to share their space with their extended family.
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structure has undergone drastic
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changes
due to urbanization. In
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many
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cities
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now
, most
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families
consist of
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just
one or two persons. In my opinion, the shrinking of the
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family
unit is an unwelcome trend.

Families are becoming smaller due to a number of reasons and it is a
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negative
trend. The main reason is that when
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people
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live
in nuclear
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families
they fail to bond with their relatives. And those who
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live
alone suffer from loneliness and depression.
For example
,
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many
urban residents who
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live
alone suffer from higher levels of
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stress
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because
they have no one to
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care
for them when they fall ill and experience other problems.
For instance
, a recent BBC documentary revealed that lack of
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family
attachment is the prime reason apart from work
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stress
that is
leading to an increased number of
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family
breakups, suicides, and domestic violence in London households. Children
also
suffer from the shrinking of
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family
size. Children with busy parents are
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left
alone at
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care
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centres
and schools without much affection and guidance to nurture them at their tender age. The support provided by day
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centres
is no match to the
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love
and
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care
a child can receive from extended
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members like grandparents.

Despite the above detrimental effects there may be a
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positive
aspect to having a
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small
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family
in a city. The
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only
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positive
side in having a
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small
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family
is financial affordability in a city environment. It is true that
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cost cutting
is
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important
for urban dwellers;
however
, living in a joint
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family
is a great way to beat loneliness, and alienation.

In conclusion
, it is evident that
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small
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families
are the norm in
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cities
although a large extended
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family
with joy and bonding is
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important
for a thriving
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family
. In my opinion, if
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given
a chance,
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people
should never hesitate to share their space with their extended
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family
.
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IELTS essay In Many Countries Today, People In Cities Either Live Alone Or In Small Family Units

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4 paragraphs
314 words
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