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In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. 7Mqy
In this modernization epoch, vast dissmilarities have taken place in numerous fields for the wages being paid to the workers due to multifariou reasons. A school of thought claim that this disparance is positive for their nation; antagonists argue that authorites should better put a limit. This essay intendes to devise both the view points and finally arrive at a personal interference. To commence with, masses who think it is adventageous for their motherland if some amount of individuals earn outrageously high, believes that certain proportion of charity is done by them to reinforce the local poverty-striken people. The vast cash which is received by high earners have chance to provide a helping hand to penurious citizen which may ultimately keep the flow of cash in circulation in the society. Moreover, they can set up their own firm providing employment to thousands of people, ultimately this may lead their motherland towards betterment. On the flip side, those who opine bureaucrats ought to set a limit have their own justification, and foremost of all reasons is equality. They believe, in a community all the citizen should have no huge discrimination by any means and so by projecting an upper limit will break the barrier among rich and penury people. Albeit their efforts in work for earning, people are not supposed to be evaluated and treated special when it comes to giving salary. This view exist so that the citizens of any nation stay connected and interdepended rather than being holding any special power or position in the society. Taking both the sides into consideration, it can be agglomerated that, although setting a limit in proving salary to vanish the barrier among citizen and uniting them is essential for peace in a nation, the opposite view holds a stronger weight. It is more rational that the masses earn what they deserve.
In this modernization epoch, vast
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dissmilarities
have taken place in numerous fields for the wages
being paid
to the workers due to
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multifariou
reasons. A school of
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thought
claim that this
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disparance
is
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positive
for their nation; antagonists argue that
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authorites
should better put a
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limit
. This essay
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intendes
to devise both the view points and
finally
arrive at a personal interference.

To commence with, masses who
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think
it is
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adventageous
for their motherland if
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some
amount of individuals
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earn
outrageously
high, believes that certain proportion of charity
is done
by them to reinforce the local
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poverty-striken
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people
. The vast cash which
is received
by high earners have chance to provide a helping hand to penurious
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citizen
which may
ultimately
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the flow of cash in circulation in the society.
Moreover
, they can set up their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
firm providing employment to thousands of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
,
ultimately
this may lead their motherland towards betterment.

On the flip side, those who opine bureaucrats ought to set a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
limit
have their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
justification, and foremost of all reasons is equality. They believe, in a community all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
should have no huge discrimination by any means and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
by projecting an upper
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
limit
will break the barrier among rich and penury
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Albeit their efforts in work for earning,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are not supposed to
be evaluated
and treated special when it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to giving salary. This view exist
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
of any nation stay connected and
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interdepended
rather
than being holding any special power or position in the society.

Taking both the sides into consideration, it can
be agglomerated
that, although setting a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
limit
in proving salary to vanish the barrier among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
and uniting them is essential for peace in a nation, the opposite view holds a stronger weight. It is more rational that the masses earn what they deserve.

IELTS essay In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level.

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309 words
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