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In many cities an increasing number of people don't know their neighbors and there is a lack of sense of community.o

In many cities an increasing number of people don't know their neighbors and there is a lack of sense of community. o ENL0Q
In today's world, a lot of people have no connections with their next-door neighbors. This issue resulted in fragmented societies. This essay will delve deeply into the factors underlying this phenomenon and then offer some potential solutions. To start with, there are many reasons that prevent people from spending time together. Firstly, nowadays no one has a sufficient amount of time to build relationships with others because individuals are busy working all day in order to be able to cover living expenses. for example, according to statistical data in Egypt, the majority of Egyptians spend about 80% of their time at work. Thus, they are not able to see their neighbors. Secondly, the lack of communication skills is also another contributing factor. In other words, there are people who have problems in communication with others so they don't have the emotional capacity to relate to others in a healthy way. Nevertheless, there are some steps that can be taken to address this issue. The first step is that leading authorities should implement regulations to deter people from working more than 8 hours per day. Finland is an example country which encourages its citizens to work only for 8 hours and they get paid very well at the same time. The second step is to spread people's awareness about the importance of learning soft skills such as interacting skills. In conclusion, In the light of what has been discussed, it is agreed that hustle lifestyle and emotional illiteracy are the main causes of social distancing problems; however, this could be solved through the above-mentioned solutions.
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a lot of
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people
have no connections with their
next
-door neighbors. This issue resulted in fragmented societies. This essay will delve
deeply
into the factors underlying this phenomenon and then offer
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some
potential solutions. To
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start
with, there are
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many
reasons that
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prevent
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people
from spending
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together.
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, nowadays no one has a sufficient amount of
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time
to build relationships with others
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because
individuals are busy working all day in order to be able to cover living expenses.
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for
example, according to statistical data in Egypt, the majority of Egyptians spend about 80% of their
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time
at work.
Thus
, they are not able to
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see
their neighbors.
Secondly
, the lack of communication
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skills
is
also
another contributing factor. In
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people
who have problems in communication with others
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they don't have the emotional capacity to relate to others
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Nevertheless
, there are
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some
steps that can
be taken
to address this issue. The
first
step is that leading authorities should implement regulations to deter
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people
from working more than 8 hours per day. Finland is an example country which encourages its citizens to work
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only
for 8
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hours and
they
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get
paid
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very
well at the same
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time
. The second step is to spread
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people
's awareness about the importance of learning soft
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skills
such as interacting
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skills
.
In conclusion
, In the light of what has
been discussed
, it is
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agreed
that hustle lifestyle and emotional illiteracy are the main causes of social distancing problems;
however
, this could
be solved
through the above-mentioned solutions.
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IELTS essay In many cities an increasing number of people don't know their neighbors and there is a lack of sense of community. o

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  American English
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264 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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